OC 91 (Chika Chinoike)

This OC is by kuronoushi1 I hope you like it.
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Name: Chika Chinoike Also known as
Angry Idiot (Shikanatsu Nara in Part 1)


Already with the laughs, nice name though.


Age:
(Boruto series) 12


Cool


Speacies: artificial human


Nice like mega Naruto


Gender: Female


Nice


Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual


Cool


Blood type: A


So she's more of a cyborg than?


Birthday: 24th March
Astrological sign: Aries


Nice


Personality: Chika is a hot tempered person, who is said to hate humans. She is stern misanthrope and ashamed easily. She has a huge ego and feels so embarrassed when her pride is hurt.


So I'm guessing that she had a fight with humans because her creators are human and she supposedly hates humans.


Good Traits: Determined to do good even if she hates humanity, you could say the will of Fire burning in her eyes.


Bad traits: She got some serious anger issues that rampage a whole lot. Chika is also ignorant on how people feel.


Great traits


Likes: Her parents, gold, shining things, rain and yellow


Dislikes: dull colours, spring, green, humans.


Nice likes and dislikes


Hobbies: fishing with her father, polishing weapons and singing before her sleep


Cute


Fears
Claustrophobia
Nyctophobia
Pluviophobia


These fit her perfectly


Strengths: Ninjustu and Funinjustu


Weaknesses: Kenjustu and chakra control


Oh so she can use ninjutsu, I would like to explain more what she is though.


Personal Qoutes: Humans are the deficiency in this world


Nice quote, for her.


Parents: none but she calls her
creaters; Akio Chinoike and Saki Chinoike


But you said she goes fishing with her father I would suggest changing father to creator than.


Siblings: None


Ok


Best friends: Shikanatsu Nara and Adohira Inuzuka


Ok


Appearance: Chika has long red hair reaching her hips, red eyes and tan skin. She wears a fishnet shirt and a sleeveless dark orange kimono shirt which secured by her red belt. She wears dark blue shorts with her kunai pouch strapped to her right leg.


Nice and it's easy to imagine.


Past: Chika was a once just moulded clay when different DNA sample were infused into her. Her 'parents' were delighted that there experiment worked although she frequently bullied and came hom with a quite literally a broken arm. Her parents will often worry about that. She grew to hate humans and due to that was dropped out of the academy permanently.


Ummm, you can't just put DNA in clay and it somehow comes to life, for Naruto that's not how it works. Clay doesn't just receive life that's like putting DNA in Play dough it's not gonna become a human.


Occupation: civilian.


So why does she have a ninja pouch than?
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Final Analysis- This OC has some bugs but is interesting at the very least. No you can't make a human or intelligent lifeforms out of clay, that's not how it works, now there are many ways that she can be similar in a way. She can be a human puppet like Sasori, a robot like Mega Naruto or be a cyborg with puppet or robot parts; but being made out of clay because DNA was put in it just doesn't work. If that was the case than my sink would be a human when I lost teeth as a kid because of the blood that I would spit in it. That's DNA but my sink it's my life long friend. I would suggest changing it to the other three styles up above because we have seen these in Naruto and it makes the most sense, Another thing is the ninja pouch. She isn't a ninja si why does she have one? Either make her a ninja or not but she can't just have one. The last thing is the fact that she said father and you call them her parents in quotations; creators would do just fine, there is no problem with her calling them mom and dad but the fact that you said yourself that she gas no parents but than puts her and her father goes fishing counters each other. Other than that there are some questions that need answers and that's it. Thank you for letting me review your OC, it was a honor.
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