OC 76 (Ark)

This is by annflan I hope you like it.
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Looks:


Ark is a short, deaf, seventeen year old Chunin with rusty colored hair and orange, cat-like eyes. His usual shinobi wear includes a long dusty-brown Kimono with an overlaying plate of silver to serve as a breastplate. He wears his forehead protector around his neck. He has a weapon pouch along a belt that holds a short-sword. His pants go mid-calf length and he wears standard nin-sandals. When in War he will wear a standard flak-jacket.



He looks a lot like Gaara if not his twin brother. Not saying that's bad but the moment I saw this picture I instantly thought of Gaara so I'm guessing you used him as a reference.


Weapon/Attack preferences:


Ark prefers short-ranged weapons, and is much more comfortable with hand-to-hand and close-ranged combat due to his deafness, as it's easier to sense/see/and feel his opponent. And harder for them to sneak up on him.


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Personality:


Ark is quiet and observant, he reads lips well and is a quick learner. Much of his drive to be a shinobi is to prove people that he can, despite not being able to hear. And because of this he is very hardworking, but tends to drive himself over the edge of exhaustion. He is also quite innovative and has created his own jutsu that allows him to feel vibrations throughout the ground. He has a low pain-tolerance and is quick to tap-out and will, more often than not, cry. His stamina is low and he will always try to end battles quickly. He gets distracted by his surroundings easily and tries to take in every sight he can, before moving into the next as quickly as possible. He is hard to communicate with due to this as his eyes will wander from one's lips when he gets bored enough. He is quick, and of average strength. He will sometimes go into hiding if he gets too overloaded with his remaining senses.


This is pretty good, it shows his weaknesses very well and makes him quite relatable.


List of Ninjutsu/Chakra Nature


His Chakra Nature is Earth, but he has some Wind ninjutsu as well. His list of Jutsu includes offensive and defensive attacks that keep his deafness in account:


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-Earth Release: Earth Military Movement Technique, Ark will feel vibrations from the ground and attack from there


-Earth Release: Rock Shield, one of Arks favorite defensive moves.


-Tsuchi Tou Tou (Swift Earth)


-Doton Henge (Earth Release Transformation)


-Wind Style: Wind Scythe


-Wind Style: Gale Palm


Ark is trying to learn new Sound-related Jutsu. Specifically one that will deafen an enemy- but not himself because he cannot hear anyway.


These are all really good and the fact that you used some known jutsus as well shows that OCs don't need all new jutsus. Good job.


Backstory


Ark was not born deaf, when he was a toddler he got a terrible ear infection that slowly deteriorated his hearing. His family was unable to pay for medical services due to him growing up in poverty in a desolated and obsolete village. After the village he was born in was attacked and burned to the ground, his parents moved to Sunagakure in hopes of a new life, where Ark first learned exactly what Shinobi were.


Ark is not entirely mute, as he was speaking before he lost his hearing. But he was quite young and prefers not to speak as much because he cannot control his pitch/volume, and many of his words are jumbled. He doesn't know sign language because no one has taught him so he bases everything on lip-reading and signals.


His parents tried to dissuade him from joining the Academy and trying to become a genin, but he was very persistent. Eventually enrolling himself and joining a class. It was incredibly difficult, he failed a lot of classes from lack of communication and a lot of people tried to tell him to quit. But he kept at it and began practicing his lip-reading with his Academy sensei, Sakyū. Who became like an uncle to him


He failed the graduation test twice, but was eventually put into a Genin team consisting of a woman named Koyōte-sensei, and two fellow genin named Aka and Hokori. Ark periodically fell behind his teammates and lost most of the battles. The only ones he was good at were battles with taijutsu, as he won most of those.


Aka and Hokori were not cruel to him, but they did believe him to be weaker and a hindrance during missions. They never said this aloud to spare his feelings, but Ark could read them well enough.


Koyōte-sensei and Sakyū-sensei ended up talking together and made a training schedule for him that took his deafness into account. Teaching him multiple jutsu, and helping him create one that would allow him to hear vibrations around him using his feet and hands.


He got lucky during the Chūnin exams, as most of the combat was closer-ranged. So he passed and became a Chūnin of Sunagakure.


This past is really well thought out. It has great detail and shows his flaws greatly. This is amazing.
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Final Analysis- This OC is something I never saw before. I have yet to review, see, or even hear of a deaf Naruto OC. This is very unique for a I see blind but I never see deaf. Not to mention the struggles he goes through and how he doesn't give up is very inspirational. This is great and is ready for any media you out him in. Thank you for letting me review your OC. It was a honor.
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