OC 64 (Kira Kanashi)

This OC is by ShotoTodorokismybae I hope you like it.
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Hi, I’v been reading your reviews and hoping you could help me with my own. I’ve been thinking she is a little over powered and wanted to get someone else’s point of view. Here she is.


Don't worry, I will tell you strictly if she is or not.


Name: Kira Kanashi


Cute


Appearance: She has long white hair, and really pale skin. People say she looks like paper. She has hetochromia. Her left eye is a sea foam green and her right eye is a light gold. She is a captain in the Anbu, so she usually wears the regular anbu outfit but with shorts. She also has to senbons keep her hair in a braid. 


Nice, your appearance isn't bad.


Age: She is 12(I know:( )


Don't worry, it is possible to be a anbu at 12.


Bio: She was the heir to the Kanashi clan before they were killed, during the kyubi attack, due to their clan living on the outskirts of the leaf..Her pregnant mother escaped due to the sacrifice her family made to get her out. The daughter was born on the same day as Naruto. Her older brother who was on a mission at this time. Came to leaf to find disaster and bear his clan, a little sister. He took care of her, telling no lies as to why the clan was destroyed. Sadly he was killed during a mission. With her brother dead, she was left to the orphanage. Luckily for her, the Sannin orochimaru has heard of her origins and took her in and trained her. (She was 6 at this time) She went and graduated from the academy a year later. Where she climed up the ranks. She became anbu captain due to her many successful missions in the red ops. Now 12 her name is in the bingo book, read as the ‘glass killer’.


I'm not gonna lie, this is actually pretty good. Too many people are scared to make OCs like this because they want to follow the rules of making a Naruto OC when they don't need too. This is the first OC I reviewed that's a prodigy for good reason. Now everything from Orochimaru is good too as long as the clan is strong, if the clan is not than Orochimaru being interested in her wouln't make sense. He takes what he wants and I assume she became a ninja in sound.


Kekkai genkai: Tengokugan(explained later) and glass release, and mirror release.


Sounds cool


Technique: She does everything really well. But she has more of an affinity for wind, lightning and water chakra styles. 


So are those her natures? If they are than that's good.


Weakness: She is very bad at fire style jutsu. She has a lot of chakra, after using the Tengokugan for a very long time, she cannot see temporarily. 


Nice but I would also make her a little less strong in 1 of the 3, ninjutsu, genjutsu, or taijutsu.


Summons: butterfly’s and owls. 


Very interesting and unique


Personality: after all she has been through, she is very cold and pessimistic. She often reads people, like books.BTW. The Tengokugan makes it so the user can transport to other dimensions suites for their liking. It can also see souls and someone’s chakra affinities. 


Ok now we get to the OP thing, Kagura goes through different dimensions and she's a god, I would recommend not different dimensions but maybe different villages that she already been too. Maybe there are requirements she has to meet, she must know about the village, has had to be there a number of times, and a matter of days before she can teleport there. I would recommend something like that than dimensions.


The character doesn’t have have Sharingen so all the jutsu people see her replicate or steal from others are ones she worked hard to learn.


Who doesn't have the sharringan, Sasuke? Please clarify more of this please.
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Final Analysis- This OC is not really over powered you had nothing to fear, it was on the borderline but other than that it was ok, the only thing that set it on the line was the traveling through dimensions which I would suggest using my recommendation to still have power but to make it less powerful if that makes sense. Everything else here is good, if there are questions above please answer them and if you have any more questions for me feel free to ask. Thank you for letting me review your OC, it was a honor.
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