This OC is by amarante7342 and I hope you like it.
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So just for starters thank you for agreeing to do more reviews! It's actually really fun to read them, and it'll be cool to get one done as well. (Well maybe two idk lol)

Thank you, it's fun to do them and I love it. Also, sure I have done more than one for a person before.

Type: Naruto Oc (of course lol)

Of course.

Name: 512 before she regains her memory/ Yuzuki Wakana afterward

Oh a number for a name. That's unique and very cool.

Age: first book 14/ second book 18

Oh cool

Gender: Female.

Nice.

Family: Yatoru Wakana (father-deceased) Itsuki Wakana (Mother- deceased) Mayonaka Wakana (twin sister- missing but alive)

Cool and thanks for the relationship with Yuzuki and their life status.

Appearance: Yuzuki has white hair, and red eyes. Her skin is extremely pale in book one but is much tanner from being outside often in book two. In book one she wears her hair long, having no way to cut it and it often looked ragged and tangled. When possible she tied it back into a low ponytail. In book two her hair is cut just below her shoulders and while on missions she keeps it back in a tight braid with a protection charm tied into it at the base. In book one her main outfit consists of a cream colored kimono like top with sleeves to her wrists, black shorts, and a fishnet undershirt. She wears her ninja gear holder on her left thigh. In book two, she wears a black pair of legging like pants, with a red sleeveless shirt that has a high neckline. In both books she wears the village headband around her neck.

Cool and it's great to see that she doesn't change too much from book 1 to book 2. Also great detail, I could imagine her and her outfits in my mind which is a good thing.

Personality: In the first book Yuzuki can be described as feral. She can be aggressive, quick to upset, and loose her cool quickly. This tends to be problematic in fights. However, once someone is special to her she would go to the ends of the earth for that person. She is almost selfless in this aspect, as she has already lost too many people she loved. This can be a weakness as well. In book two Yuzuki has mellowed out her temper to where it takes much more to make her aggressive during fights. Too many close calls was her teacher over the years. However, she could still get aggressive if the situation is pushed, and if she is cornered then the stress makes it even more likely.

Her personality has great flaws which is great for her character and the fact that her hair has tangles and she's called feral is perfect. Her personality goes great with her appearance and adds character.

In book two Yuzuki is capable to find happiness in little things, and often tries to find a bright side. Living with her teammates has taught her the art of sarcasm, and she absolutely uses it.

Cool, I can see her using it as a comic relief or her just learning it as a funny moment.

Battle: book one- Yuzuki fights mostly with her hands or what ever weapon she can get her hands on (as in a tree branch? Sure that can be swung around sort of thing. She certainly isn't good at all of them. In fact her best weapon would be a metal bat/pole) when using chakra, she usually lashes out using what few hand signs she can remember. Most often her chakra is used, only my muscle memory and does not take a shape of an actual move. After regaining more of her memory she can create icicles and a fire ball but that is the extent of her Justus, the icicles more of my instinct and accident.

Oh ok, I also like how she uses her resources and lashes out which makes her even more feral. Even the icicles being instincts and accidents bring more of her feral side into play. Good job.

Book two- as four years has passed Yuzuki has been training and is now specialized in dual swords. One for each of her chakra elements, she prefers to use her swords to channel her chakra rather than use jutsu's on their own but she knows fireball( spitting a ball of fire basically), fire wall(creating a small wall of fire), and fire sword technics (basically regular sword technics but with the blade aflame). As for her Icejutsu's she has a harder time controlling this element so while the second blade can be coated in sharp ice, making icicles of various sizes is she best she has. As she remembers her training from the days in her academy, she is no longer behind the others her age besides what has been learned through practice.

Oh ok, her fighting has really matured in book 2 and her jutsus fit her perfectly. She has also learned a great and fair amount in 4 years.

Past: Yuzuki was born into a clan where blood ties are everything, they're snooty and believe that they are better than others. They're extremely racist to those who do not look like them. Being born into this class without the same markings (white hair and blue eyes) is deem-able as a sin. Marrying outside of the clan is almost as crazy sounding. Yuzuki's father was not a Wakana, and her mother was an outcast of the clan.

Oh ok, thanks for explaining the village and their morals. They sound like a narcissistic clan and I can see it fitting them.

When they married they planned to leave the clan, but the leader of the clan began to rein them in, (saying things like one more mission then you have my permission to go, one more task) and eventually the girls were born. As neither were born purebred they were not allowed into the ninja teachings but were taught at home by their parents who were both shinobi.

Oh ok, so they really are racist and hate people outside the clan. So do they call Yuzuki hybrid or some kind of nickname for not being a full blooded member?

When Yuzuki was ten there was an 'accident' (murder) and both of Yuzuki's parents perished. Yuzuki knew of her clans hate toward herself and her sister so when she heard that the elder was coming she staged a murder of her own before sending her sister to run. The elder took Yuzuki into his custody and then sent her away to an Experiment hall. Here Yuzuki's memory is tapped and then blocked so that she does not remember anything (it's a jutsu along the lines of the mind control, preformed by an outsider whose in it for big bucks and the Wakanas pretend he doesn't exist) and is given a cell name and mate. She survives using various technics from acting to murder to stay alive four years. This is where book one starts.

Oh so she staged the murder to save her sister. She's a good sister.

In book one Yuzuki starts with very very few relationships. She has lived with her cell mate 513 for four years and has grown very close to him. He is her best friend, and though she would never admit it, her crush. She finds herself leaning on him more and more. As she meets Kayla, Riku, and Hazu she begins to develop friendships but is more wary and has a hard time trusting at first. But as they grow together and spend time together on missions and living in the same apartment, she eventually develops that friendship. Kayla is still her closest friend. In book two, Yuzuki would kill and die for Riku and Hazu. Kayla she is still close to but Kayla is more like the delinquent younger sister to her at this point. There is a small internal battle in Yuzuki on if she develops a crush on Hazu, but she knows that he is certainly special to her.

Oh ok, so she makes friends in this prison type place. So what happened to 513? Did he die? Was he executed? What happened to him?

Other: So the Wakana clan are more nomadic, and spread out not belonging to one village or another. After escaping Yuzuki lives and learns in a new village, the village hidden in the Sakura. So if there is anything I'm missing or any questions I'll be happy to answer. I don't know if it's appropriate to include that I've typed yuzuki's story and as still typing it... if it is great I'd love to include it and if it's not that's fine, I still would love to hear what you think. Thank you!

No problem and I am giving you the best advice, suggestions, and questions that would show up. I think you should include what you want because it gives the reader more to see about your OC and makes them feel more connected to her.
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Final Analysis- This OC is great and has little to nothing to work on. She has a good personality and appearance that binds together with her battle and with each other in general. Even the relationships with this OC is great. I would love to read a story about this OC and the character she meets and knows like Riku and Hazu. The only thing you really have to do is answer the questions which isn't hard at all but other than that this OC is amazing and should be shared. Thank you so much for letting me review her. It was a honor.
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