OC 116 (Ryūta)

This OC is by SkyDrop_Unit I hope you like it.
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Genre: I write this OC because I want to write a fan fiction in a different era of Naruto and my OC is kinda a reincarnation one. I need to find someone to criticize because most of them are not that interested in Naruto. Haha


Lol don't worry I'll help you


Name: Ryūta


Oh so no last name? It's still a good name


Age: 31 (before the destruction of Uzushiogakure/the beginning of the Second Shinobi War)


Nice


Birthday: July 8


Cool


Sex: Male


Nice


Gender: Heterosexual (or you could say straight)


You can say either one


Family: Natsuro (father/deceased), Sayaka (mother/deceased), Naoko (sister/living), Aya (niece/living), Yasu (second cousin/living)


Thanks for the life status and family relations.


Appearance: Ryūta has messy, dark hair and black-brown eyes which he inherited them from his father. Most of all, he just look plain average to anyone's eyes.


Nice, so he doesn't stick out much.


Outfit: He usually wears his distinctive Uzushio Jōnin flak jacket and wears his hitai-ate over his forehead. He mostly wears a mesh shirt under his a black turtle neck shirt with long sleeves, dark blue pants with a kunai holster on his leg, and black shinobi sandals. He has bandages wrapped on his hands to below his elbow and on his ankles up under his knees. He also wears a pair of seal earrings to balance his "abnormal chakra channels" (the definition of the seal and the true reason will be revealed in the story).


This is really good I feel like I can actually see him in Naruto.


Personality: In most people's outside perspective, they describe Ryūta as an intuitive and sentimental man. However, Ryūta is not the type of person who takes sympathy without a reason. He is a pragmatic man who prefers to study people's background first (aka stalking) before deciding to trust them or not. Living with the Uzumaki clan had somehow added his quirky personality which he claims that he "lost his sanity" from them. He is also intelligent but clearly has no ambition in life and just goes with the flow. Despite claiming to be independent, he is very loyal to his village especially to his comrades. PS. He is also a closet pervert.


This is really good, the fact that you have many traits to describe him makes him realistic. Not to mention the fact that he does his research on people shows even more and adds value to his character.


Abilities:
Ninjutsu:
*Scorch release: Extreme Steaming Murder
*Scorch release: Incinerating Flare *Scorch style: Dancing Inferno
*Wind style: Breakthrough
*Wind style: Wind scythe (only with weapons)
*Wind release: Tornado (he rarely used that)
*Wind release: Overpressured
*Fire style: Fireball jutsu
*Body flicker technique (Shushin) *Substitution technique (Kawarimi) *Transformation jutsu
Genjutsu: None except dispelling some average ones
Taijutsu: He usually use the Uzumaki style ones combined with his own which is an acrobatic fighting style that requires a lot of speed and reflexes. Bukijutsu (Weapons Technique):
*Senbon (It was taught by his mother before she passed away) and he has a deadly accuracy in it
*Shuriken
*Kunai Fūinjutsu: It was obvious because his teacher is an Uzumaki. He only knows the basic and he uses them to make storage seals.


This is great and these go great with his personality, it also seems to go good with his background with his mentor.


Rank: He doesn't join an academy since he moved to the village before it was created. After he demonstrated his skills, he was put under as an apprentice with a Jōnin which automatically made him a Genin at the age of 9. He didn't become a Chūnin until he turned 15 due to his low chakra stores. He was later promoted to Jōnin at the age of 18 through field promotion. Although he returned with broken bones from a certain mission.


This is very interesting and unique, I never thought of this before and this is the first time I ever saw this. Amazing.


Kekkei Genkai: Scorch release – although he rarely used that technique if only necessary because of his low chakra stores.


Great


Skills/Battle styles: Ryūta excels in Ninjutsu but rarely uses any advance ones or else he'll ended up in chakra exhaustion. Most of the Shinobi in Uzushio are either have Wind and Water affinities that's why he only knew one fire technique. He rely mostly on Taijutsu and Weapons especially senbon. He is known for mastering poisons, medicines, drugs, and acupuncture from his mother in which he advances them.


Great.


Past: All Ryūta remembered from his childhood that his family always moved from one place to another and, most of the time, they often travelled separately. His father, Natsuro, was a native in Sand country who is Scorch release user and is often travel with his nephew, Yasu. Their clan was diminished many years ago during the Warring Clans era as a result: only a very few survived. Ryūta's mother, Sayaka, was originally from the Water country where she was taught to use medicine (like drugs and acupuntures) and has knowledge in poisons. She is a traveling doctor and met Natsuro when Yasu brought him to heal his injuries. Ryūta's father died before he was born and he was separated from his sister in order to train her kekkei genkai from Yasu. He was saved by a rogue Senju after his mother was killed for her bounty to steal her drugs and their ingredients. Sadly, the Senju died protecting him. An Uzumaki took him to Uzushio and let him live there as a Shinobi.


This is really good.


Relationship to other characters:
*His Jōnin teacher, Uzumaki Takuya, is Kushina's grandfather.
*His relationship with Uzumaki Ashina is more likely a commander and soldier type.
*He rarely met Senju Hashirama and his wife, Uzumaki Mito.
*He treats Senju Tobirama with politeness(?) and respect(?).
*He is very close to his teammates and his Genin students called "Baby Seahorses" (which will later reveal in the story).
*When he later turned Jōnin, he has a partner named Uzumaki Satomi who is a Special Jōnin. Many had bet that those two will either end up dating or not.


These are great


Facts:
*He was dubbed as the "Suicidal Ninja" despite the fact he was known for his Scorch release. (Reasons will reveal in the story.)
*He never talk about his past life, but he slightly revealed that he was a Military Doctor.
*He was born with "weird" taste buds which led him to hate vegetables.
*His favorite food is Inarizushi, a kind of sushi or rice ball. It is coincidentally Madara's favorite food.
*He is older than the Sannin.
*He dislikes complex seals and being used as an experiment (from the courtesy of the Nidaime).
*He never shows empathy either in battle or pissed off.
*Most of his colleagues and the younger generation called him "girly" for his skill sets. A few days later, they are found paralyzed in their beds.


Great facts, and the last one really shows another side of him.
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Final Analysis- Eveything falls perfectly with this OC, it's balanced, and honestly feels like he should be in the show. I would love to read his story so I can learn more about the things I couldn't. But this is a really good OC and you did great making him. Thank you so much for letting me review your OC, it was a honor.
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