This OC is by MisakeUchiha13
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Name: Ikimono Kānēshon (meaning Critter Carnation)

This is a cute name.

Age: 12

Oh cool

Gender: Female

Nice

Family: Unknown (No one knows, it is a mystery), Ri Kānēshon (Adopted mother, 38), Lilith Kānēshon (Adopted sister, 14)

Oh a little mysterious vibe to her. Good job.

Appearance:

Hair color- long pastel pink hair with pastel blue streaks in the front.

Cool

Eye color- blood red

Nice

Skin tone- Pale

Ok

Height- 4'4

weight- 87 pounds

Nice height to weight ratio.

Clothing- red chain top(Like shikamru's) that has no shoulders, black jacket that goes to her waist that has a hood that is always up, black leggings, long blue-ish black ninja sandals, forehead protector around her neck, black and red gloves, weapons pouch on her right leg.

Good, I would recommend not saying leggings though because that sounds very modern. I would go with ninja tights. Also it's called a fish net top so you know.

Personality: Ikimono is polite, keeps her guard up, calm though she will get set off if you call her critter because of her name, and she can be too blunt about things.

So there are little things That trigger her so I wouldn't call her calm but more normal like she has her calm moments but also her angry moments.

Battle: She will lurk in the shadows with her hood up because of her hair color and attack when needed, she also will trap her enemy in a genjutsu if they start to catch on to her, lastly she will set up traps when it is needed.

Ok, her guard up side to her personality goes great with her battle type.

weapons: Senbon needles, Kunai, trip wire, shuriken, smoke bombs.

Oh nice and common ninja tools.

Past: It is unknown were Ikimono was born, or who her parents are. Konoha found Ikimono in a forest when she was 4 years old. Among this, she was brought to Konoha when she was found, the ANBU who found her took her to the Hokage so he could make his decision for her to stay or leave. After a little bit, the Hokage easily agreed to have her stay because she had no one or anywhere to go.

Just because she has no where else to go doesn't mean the hokage will say yes. Remember what Kakashi said earlier in Naruto. There are ninjas stronger than him but were younger than Naruto. Not to mention it wouldn't be easily decided because the hokage has to take many things into consideration before even handing over citizenship to a little unknown girl who could be or not dangerous.

Around that time, Iruka tout her how to speak since she didn't know how to. Shortly after, Ri Hana adopted Ikimono since Ri already had a daughter, Lilith Hana. While growing up in the Leaf Village Ikimono and Lilith formed a great bond between each other and went to the same class in the academy since for two years Lilith couldn't decide if she wanted to be a ninja or not.

Ok, they sound like they have a good sister bond. There is nothing wrong here.

While older a bit, Ikimono was called 'critter' by some people in her class resulting in the people to be shaking in fear under Ikimono's harsh glare and how much force she puts on someone's wrist when they pull her hair. Truth be told, Ikimono is kind and caring with a barrier surrounding her, personality wise. That's about it to Ikimono's past.

A lot of the characters in Naruto is not scared of a glare unless it is comical. So even if she gives a harsh glare it wouldn't scare people or would make the people reading think she is scary.

Other: Ikimono can often be seen eating her lunch while in a tree, no one knows why though.

Ok
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Final Analysis- This OC doesn't have much to work on. One thing is the leggings which sound a bit to modern for the Naruto world. The next thing is the past where she ends up in konoha. She is 4 so a 4 year old would have some common sense and run away from grown people though they would catch her. But the fact that the hokage let her in without thinking it over isn't something a hokage would do. Other than those things everything else is fine. Thanks for letting me review your OC. It was a honor.