OC 120 (Arashi Senju)

This OC is by EtoileCyber2 I hope you like it.
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Name: Arashi Senju (千手嵐, Senju Arashi)
Alt Names/Nicknames: Thunder (雷, Rai), Honorable Great Grandson (偉大な孫, Idaina mago), Second Hokage's Legacy (二代目火影の遺贈, Nidaime Hokage no Izō,
Literally meaning: Legacy of the Second Fire Shadow)


This is great and thanks for the extra names and information.


DOB: October 25th


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Gender: Male


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Age:
11-12 (Part 1),
14-16 (Part 2),
18+ (Series end)


Nice, so he's about naruto age but maybe the youngest.


Height:
4'4" (Part 1),
5'0 (Part 2),
5'11" (Series end)
Weight:
62lbs (Part 1),
88lbs (Part 2),
121lbs (Series end)


Great height to weight ratios


Kekkei Genkai: Ice Release (Hyōton)


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Occupation: Heir of the Senju Clan


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Affiliation: Konohagakure


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Clan: Senju Clan (Born into), Uzumaki Clan (Descended from), Yuki Clan (Descended from)


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Rank:
Genin (Part 1),
Chūnin (Part 2),
Jōnin (Series end) 


So pretty much like Shikamaru and Sakura


Relatives: Butsuma Senju (Great Great Grandfather, deceased), Tobirama Senju (Great Grandfather, deceased), Ritsuko Uzumaki (Great Grandmother, deceased), Ryū Senju (Grandfather, alive), Hashirama Senju (Great Granduncle, deceased), Mito Uzumaki (Great Grandaunt, deceased), Tsunade Senju (Second Cousin once removed, alive), Nawaki Senju (Second Cousin once removed, deceased), Kawarama Senju (Great Granduncle, deceased), Itama Senju (Great Granduncle, deceased), Airi Senju (Mother, alive), Keito Senju (Father, alive) 


Thanks for the family relations and life status.


Nature Type: Water Release (Suiton), Wind Release (Fūton)


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Tools: Shuriken, Kunai, Sword of the Thunder God (heirloom), Ninja Wire, Makibishi, Smoke Bombs, Explosive Tags 


Very nice and the heirloom is a nice touch.


Additional Tool Info: In Legacy, The Sword of the Thunder God was never successfully stolen from the village and remained in the care of Tobirama's descendants. After Tobirama's death in the First Shinobi War, the sword fell into the possession of his son, Ryū, who later passed it down to his daughter, Airi. Airi, eventually, gave it to her own son after his promotion to Chūnin.


Really good, and thanks for showing who passed it down through generations.


Appearance: Arashi's appearance takes more after the maternal side, his grandfather and great grandfather to be more specific; having inherited the silver, spiky hair of both. He has his father's turquoise eyes.
As a child, his hair was shorter with bangs that covered his forehead resembling Tobirama; this similarity becomes more pronounced as Arashi gets older. Early in his academy career, Arashi wore the traditional pinstriped pants of his clan with a sleeveless dark shirt; opting to wear the haori only during the colder months of the school year. As he neared graduation, he switched out his clans traditional attire in favor of what's in with the times - similar to his classmates.
As a Genin, Arashi wore a long sleeved, hip length, black and navy jacket with the navy showing more prominence than the black and the Senju clan symbol on the back, under that is a black lined mesh armour shirt, navy shin length pants and black shinobi sandals completed the outfit. Once Arashi receives his forehead protector, he wears it around his forehead with bangs that he grew out, hanging over it and framing his left eye. The metal plate is on a cloth that's a darker shade of blue than that of his peers. After the time skip, Arashi is seen wearing an updated version of his original outfit; the jacket is longer and formfitting with a detachable white fur collar, he switched out the forehead protector for a silver happuri similar to the one worn by Tobirama, his pants are also longer and cover his shinobi boots. He's also started wearing face paint in the form of three lines; one under each eye and on the chin, with the only difference between his and Tobirama's being that his is blue where Tobirama had red.


This is amazing and each phase he has through the years is relatively similar. It's really good. The fact that he also takes looks from his ancestors as well adds true value to his heritage and his character.


Personality: Arashi has always been studious and took training as a future shinobi seriously - his favorite subjects to read are history and geography. This characteristic sets him apart from his rowdier peers; the loud, attention seeking, look-at-me types that don't take their studies as seriously as they should. He likes to stick to himself, for the most part, but that doesn't mean that he's cold or unfeeling towards others - ex; Sasuke. When he does decide to interact or hang around his classmates, they're often similar to him; Hinata, Shino, Choji and Shikamaru are good examples of that. Having been born into the Senju clan, a world renown clan and the village's most influential, Arashi grew up with his fellow villagers having high expectations for him as the great grandson of the Second Hokage. Being the great grandson of the Second Hokage, Arashi holds his ancestor in high regard; wanting nothing more than to follow in his footsteps, or at the very least to live up to the Senju name and make him proud. Arashi is seen as calm, composed, mature and very confident in what he does. Due to his relations to two of the Hokage's, other people - whether they be his peers at the academy or an adult - are either awed or intimidated by him. Despite the demeanor that he exudes, Arashi does show exasperation when others are being disrespectful; such as Naruto defiling the Hokage Stone Faces, or in the case of some of the girls in his class, not living up to their potential as they are too busy fawning over boys. After inheriting The Sword of the Thunder God, Arashi showed another side to personality. He knows the sword was originally owned by his great grandfather, knowing that he treats the sword like a prized possession, a treasure, and is highly protective of it. When somebody not family tries to wield his great grandfather's sword, Arashi is capable of showing a truly violent side towards that individual.


This is really good and shows a side to him that you wouldn't expect.
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Final Analysis- This OC is good and like your other OC I believe that more should be added. He is already good but I believe you can make him better. He has an amazing start and with your skill I know it can only get better. However it's your choice. I hope I get to see him in a story. Thank you so much for letting me review your OC, it was a honor.
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