Hello everyone and I know this took some time but it's because I have something i need to talk about. It will be in the important passage but for now, enjoy this OC. This OC is by KurushimiAkuma I hope you like it.
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Name - Aislyn Nidra

Nice name

Age - 12 (currently)

Nice, so the Naruto group's age

Species - Human

Good

Gender - Female

Cool

Sexuality - Straight

Cool

Personality - Aislyn is rather reserved, she dosen't really open up to anyone because of her clan and not wanting them to question her. However, despite not being able to show it, she is confident and sarcastic.

Thanks, and I'm sure I'll find out why she is reserved because of her clan.

Family relationships - She has a mother, a father, an older sister, and an aunt. Her older sister killed her mother and tried to kill her father, however her father ended up killing her. Later her father was killed, her aunt was no where to be found (explained in backstory).

Ok, and thanks for giving me the roles and life status of each family member.

Background summary - The Nidra clan is a clan that lives in their own small village near Konoha. Many times Aislyn went there as a kid. Aislyns father was the leader of the Nidra clan, and her older sister was going to be apart of the side branch. When her older sister realized this she attacked and killed her mother. But Aislyn's sister was unable to kill her father who killed her in deep regret. During this time the Nidra clan was being hunted down and killed becuase of their virtually useless powers. Aislyn was kept in captivity after the small town was in ruins, she escaped using her powers on the sleeping guard and found herself back at konoha. She was good friends with Shisui and he managed to get her a place to stay. Only a few months later the Uchiha Massacre happened, but because of her appearance, it ended up being pushed back a month. Aislyn is now at the academy and is going to be put on the team 7.

Why was it pushed back a month because of her appearance? Shisui died before the massacre so even if she was friends with shisui it wouldn't matter because it's not like he stopped it. If anything Itachi is the one to try and be friends with but even than he killed everyone he loved except Sasuke. The last thing is they just let guards sleep on duty? Why wasn't he switched out with a another like he would be in real life and not in a looney toons cartoon. Plus how is her sister going to be in the side branch if she was born into the main, her father is the leader so it's no reason why unless he disowned her. Ok I lied one more thing, how did she find her way back to konoha especially if she was kidnapped? How could a younger than 7 year old child know where to go and not get ambushed by other ninjas? It's just not making sense. I recommend answering these questions.

Skills - Aislyn has almost(below) average taijutsu skills, a small amount of chakra, barely any physical strength, and slightly above average ninjutsu and genjutsu skills. She is able to use only three different water style jutsu's, however her second chakra nature (lightning) has not been devoloped yet.

Ok, this is good.

Appearance - Aislyn (like most of her clan members) has dark purple hair. Her hair is tied up into a loose bun with a red scrunchie, however some of the hairs have fallen around her to form some what of a bob cut. She has bright orange eyes that she always keeps covered with bangs. She wears dark a bark blue t-shirt and her forehead protector is around her waist acting as a belt helping to hold up her dark blue combat skirt, underneath being black legging down to her ninja sandals. She has light tan, borderline pale skin, and whenever she's happy her mouth almost forms into a heart.

Leggings do not exist in the Naruto world. I would suggest switching leggings to fishnet stockings like Ino's.

Abilities - As apart of the Nidra clan, the main Nidra clan skill is their ability to go into people's dreams, however the main branch members can even consult with dead people during their sleep. The main branch also have eyes simmilar to the sharingan which are characterized by the bright ornage (if the person does not have the main branch eyes, their eyes are yellow). The orange eyes have no name, but once someone looks into them, they put people to sleep instantly, however they also work on the user with a 50% chance. If the user of the eyes is able to put the other person to sleep, they are able to enter their dreams and completely control them. Most of the Nidra clan is known for having stuning good looks which attracts the hunters, then them being able to use their eyes afterwords is a bonus.

So they look like the Sharringan but Is different and have a orange color? Nice, and this ability seems very interesting and unique, it can be useless if a ninja learns to fight with his or her eyes closed but that makes a great flaw.

Weaknesses - Aislyn isn't very adept at taijutsu, nor does she have an outrageous amount of chakra to use against people, she hesataites in the face of danger and is scared of using her eyes on anyone.

So she's kind of a coward? That's actually a good flaw to have cause than she can build up her confidence during her story.

Strengths - If Aislyn does look anyone in the eye she puts them asleep immediately. Aislyn's stamina is pretty high and she is a fast runner despite not being strong. She can hold her own in a fight and is willing to help. Aislyn is good at aiming and predicting her opponents moves.

How can hold her own in a fight if she's scared to be in the face of danger and hesitates? That just pushed away the argument of her weakness. She wouldn't be able to hold her own in a fight if she is too scared to look someone in the eye and hesitates at the face of danger. She can work up to this when she gets older but as it stands now she wouldn't be able to hold her own, especially if she can't even throw the first punch. Plus you don't need to be strong to be fast.

Weapons - Aislyn just uses the normal shuriken and kunai.

Nice

Other information - - Aislyn's sister only had one of the orange eyes which can be easily overpowered by two.

I would think so. But thanks for clearing that up.

- The hidden personality of Aislyn is like a potion you can use that gets you a (+5) bonus in most games. She can take the other by shock, but doesn't want to do that because they will question her eyes.

A hidden personality? There was nothing about that anywhere until now. Take what by shock? What can this thing do? I need more information.

- She cannot trust anyone due to the hunters.

Do she have PTSD?

- Aislyn will eventually meet a keelut or an Ala to be her summoning that always stays with her.

Always stay with her like what a pokemon? You mean to just be her permanent summoning? If that's the case alright but the wording is a little weird.
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Final Analysis- This OC is good but has some things it needs work on. One thing is the fact that her weakness and her strength go against each other. She can't be scared and hesitate but can also hold her own that makes no sense no matter what way you put it. All of the girls in Naruto can hold their own in a fight and it's because they don't hesitate. Now if one of them did than the situation would be dire. It's a good weakness but maybe when she's older that strength can come in. The next is how your changing a month's time for the massacre just because of your OC's appearance, the massacre is basically a historical event in the Naruto world like the nine tails attack, if it changed the date than the event might not play out the way it did. For instance if one of our historical dates happened on a different day it could have possibly changed today where we are now, so I would recommend not even changing it. She is younger than 7 so she shouldn't know her way around the world like her brain is a map, maybe have someone from the village rescued her and brought her instead, or have someone else bring her from the clan that also escapes but don't make the 7 year old do it by herself, it's not realistic even for anime terms. The way she escapes is also in a hole because what guard sleeps on the job if they are not in a cartoon. Maybe she throws something to knock him out and use her jutsu instead, you said she has good aim so you might as well utilize it. There are some other things like clothes and stuff but that's all small things and don't need to much attention. Other than those things this is a solid OC with great potential and I can see her doing great. Thank you for letting me review your OC, it was a honor.
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