This OC is by SeverinaDances I hope you like it.
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Genre: for fun? I don't really write and hadn't Role Played in awhile; but used to be part of this old group that we all made OCs for and wrote stories, drew picture, RP, etc...this was my more serious OC.

Ok, and thanks for choosing me to review your OC.

Name: Suzume (meaning Sparrow) Saito (Wisteria)

Nice name

Age: Part one around 19-20 and Part two most likely 23 (though probably about 24 by the time the war arc starts). Unsure about Boruto as I hadn't kept up with it; but she would have a daughter named Sayuri by that point. 

Nice, she would be around Itachi's age than.

Gender:Female

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Country: Land of Lightning/Kumogakure 

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I was thinking of changing her name since in Kumo, most have a name related to their personality or something. 

True, but it's your OC, you can do whatever you want.

Family: 
Father:Kenta
Mother: Mao
Older sister: Junko
Younger brother: Masaru

Nice, and thanks for the roles.

Appearance: Natural red (though in terms of Naruto, it is closer to orange than a bright red. Similar to like Yahiko's hair color for example). Hair often pulled back at the sides and held by a clip. Eyes reddish brown but thinking of changing that to fit more with others in her village (probably more brown). Hair might also change to a more blondish color since many seem to have light/blond hair or dark hair. This is the part I struggle with as I want her to look like she fits in with the village; yet at the same time not blend in too much either. Height 5'3" & weight around 125. Skin color more of a light tan.

It's fine, you don't have to blend in with the village like a clan because take where you live for example. Not everyone looks the same there right? Don't worry, she can look different and nice height to weight ratio.

Bodytype-Since she is more of taijutsu user, so she has more of toned looked due to her muscles. Body type overall is like an inverted triangle they call it.

Oh ok, that's great and it has a reason.

Outfit. Style is similar to a qipao that is a dark blue with a yellow trim (mandarin collar?) and short sleeves; but with high slits on the side for mobility (it is easier show a picture than to describe, I am sorry about that). She wears shorts underneath and probably has a chainmail top under the qipao for extra protection and coverage. Around her waist is a modified flak jacket similar to how Samui wears hers and right under that is a sash where her forhead protector is. She wears black ninja sandals that are around mid length. Also a part of black arm guards, a pound, two pairs of small fans with sharp tips for cutting enemies when fighting up close & katana. 

This is great and I can imagine it easily in my head. Great job.

Personality: Before the war and all that or around part one, she was very friend and carefree since she had yet to experience anything that death of a close relative, war, etc....so she didn't take things seriously. She would often joke around, hiding any negative feelings as she was taught not to show it. 

Awesome and very relatable because people like that exist today. (I'm one of them)

She could also been seen as lazy (like often not wanting to do chores, studying etc...she mainly found it boring and only was interested in exciting things) and had a rude habit of interrupting others. Needless today, she was a immature at first. Often told to grow up and take things more seriously. Part of the reason why she admires C/Shii because he takes things seriously and his hardworking. 

This is great and shows the mind of a kid and could be relatable to people in real life.

Later one or in part 2 she starts to shape up. While still friendly & still likes to make jokes, she starts taking things more seriously and starts working harder. Part of the reason was due to the forth Ninja War. She had to be more serious as lives depended on it. She has also gotten a bit older & understands that life isn't just fun and games. Things that come with experience & time.Battle: Her main skills are Taijutsu, close range and a senor. 

The way she grows up does show that she matures greatly and that's perfect as she goes into shippuden. Amazing.

Weaknesses:Long range and Genjutsu. 

Cool

Elements: Lightning and wind, usually used to help enhance her weapons when fighting close range. 

Awesome

Jutsu-

Lightening Style: Electroshock-She uses her metal weapons, such as her handheld fans and her lightening affinity and conducts the lighting towards the enemy/opponents or send it to the ground as lighting can travel, shocking then.

That's cool and a nice way to incorporate her jutsu with her weapon.

Wind Style: Invisible blades-wind affinity can help sharpen weapons, such as the edges of her swords or fans as well make tiny invisible blades that can be thrown at the enemy. 

Cool

Her lighting can only travel so far and she can also use it so much due to amount of chakra it uses. She is weak against water as since she doesn't have affinity and could electrocute her if she is using lightning. Also against fire. Wind tends to spread the flames and makes the metal too hot.

Nice and I like how you use the elements to come up with her weaknesses.

Past: Started out pretty average. 
Grew up with two siblings. Her older sister who was serious yet kind would often help Suzume with advice when needed. Suzume has always looked up to her. Her younger brother finds Killer B's rapping interesting, so he would often try to rap and make up his own rhymes. Sometimes Suzume and Masaru would play small pranks on their sister Junko. All in all, I see them as a close knit family. 

They do sound like a close family, this is great.

I imaged that her sister would make a great spy to gather information and their younger brother just became a chunin and using kenjutsu. 

I can see it.

Entered the academy at around age 6 or 7 as that was the normal age range most start at. Graduated around age 11. Became a Chunin at around age 15 (took her awhile since she had to work more on physical fighting skills-Taijutsu and weaponry opposed to ninjutsu or genjutsu. So strength and accuracy was extremely important). She became a jounin around age 18.

This is a wonderful system, and the ages make a lot of sense with her promotion. Great job.

Ninja Stats

Ninjutsu: 3/5
Taijutsu: 5/5
Genjutsu: 2/5 
Intelligence: 3/5 
Strength: 4/5
Speed: 3/5
Stamina: 3/5
Hand-seals: 2/5
Total: 25/40

This is awesome, her stats are very good, not weak and not OP.

Really, I tried to make it more balanced so that she wouldn't seem too OP or too weak. Make sure she didn't graduate or move up too young since that was rare, etc...

You did amazing great job.

Relationships: She later marries Shii/C and they have a daughter together named Sayuri.

Beautiful, I never see OCs with underrated characters like C so this is perfect.

How they met: They grew up in the same village and she always admired his dedication. She wished she could of been more like him. Though seeing how she was slightly older, they didn't really hangout much at first.

Oh ok, so they have that kind of Temari and Shikamaru age gap, ok.

It wasn't until the war that they really got to know each others. Since both were sensors, they were in the same unit with Ao as their caption in the sensor division. This was both their first time when it came to war and told that staying on task was important when it came to the outcome. So they ended up spending a lot of time working together. 

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They both probably help balance each other out. Shii/C (depends on how one spells his name) probably makes sure Suzume stays on task/focus and Suzume probably helps lighten the mood with her jokes when she feels C is stressed out or being too serious. 

Oh ok, and her personality looks like it would go great with his.

One thing in common is that both are quite confident.

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Other: I think that is mostly it besides small tidbits. She has no special kekkei genkai or anything like that, unless it is something that could work with her two elements (but not something I really thought about to be honest, since she is more of a close range fighter).
She likes calligraphy (she finds it fun yet relaxing).

Well she is awesome regardless.

Her favorite food is noodles.

Cool

Birthday is October 1st 
Blood type is O+

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Her sensei was named Daichi and he was the one that gave her the two fans. He taught her how she could use them in battle to enhance her fighting style. Since the folding part are made of metal, they are sturdier. They are small, so she can keep them hidden or can carry them without much trouble and have sharp tips so she can use them in the place of a kunai. 

Ok

I never did create the rest of her team though.

It's no problem, gotta make the main character before you make the side ones.

If you want to see artwork of what she looks like or need more information to get an better idea, let me know and I could always message you. Some things were a bit old and need more updating. 

Alright, I would like to see a picture but I think I got a pretty good picture of her in my head.

Sorry, I noticed she isn't the most exciting OC compared to others.

What to do you mean? She is by far one of the most interesting, it doesn't matter her Kekkei Genkai or anything else, she is exciting.

Goal: I think her goal and hardest think is probably find her place in this world, specially after the war. Once the war was over and all that, there was peace, so there isn't much use for her fighting style or sensor skills. Since she refused to learn healing early one as she was more interested in other things and wanted to be seen as strong, she can't do that and I feel that might be something she would regret later on. 

Ok, that is also a great goal to have.

I think that one reason she likes calligraphy and painting, it gives her a new sense of purpose but not enough to fulfill her life. She wants to feel needed in this world, that she is useful still and determined to find something she can do.Oh another thing I forgot to add was fears (sorry to keep posting things, I can't edit and somethings I didn't really think about posting and feels a bit all over the place). One of her fears is heights. She likes being on the ground as she feels stable. She also probably won't like traveling on boat either for the same reason. 

Oh ok, her fears are very realistic which only makes it better. Great job.

Being near something on cliffs or traveling anyway other than by foot would probably make her nervous. 

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Friends-I see this happening after the war as it more likely without having to create new OCs or feeling out of place. 

Ok, you can also make her friends with Canon characters too.

She would probably get along with people like Karui, Tenten, Temari, Kiba, etc...

Yeah I can see her getting along with them, same with Naruto as well.

She likes people who she can easily chat with no problem or are bold and speak their mind as it amuse her. 

Oh ok, this is nice.

I see her having a bit harder time with shy characters, not that she would hate them or anything; but would feel awkward if she isn't able to have much of a conversation with them. 

That's new and great. It makes her different from the people who treat shy characters like babies.

As for dislikes,she would hate if someone assumed that she is weaker or not as skilled (she lacks an kekkei genkai and doesn't use as much ninjutsu, etc...) even before they battled with her. She wants to be measured by her skills and strength fairly. While it would annoy her, she might be able to use them underestimating her to her advantage (such as taking the opportunity to use her lightning jutsu).

These are some great dislikes. Great job.
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Final Analysis- This OC is really good and had nothing to work on. I would however, like to be updated when this OC has any changes made to her or if she gets a story. She is a great OC who had a nice take on things and is very interesting. Thank you for letting me review your OC, it was a honor.
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