OC 35 (Temashi Nara)

This OC is by NishiSoyaaa I hope you like it.
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Genre = Anime 
(Boruto: Naruto Generations)


Oh cool


Have no love interest


Different which is good.


Name: Temashi Nara (I merged Temari and Shikamaru's name together)


Cute and it's a adorable way to combine them. Not to mention it's combined in a way where it's not a ship name it's like a regular name.


Nickname: Tema, or mashi-chan


I like these nicknames. They are very cute and are perfect with her names. However, the first one Tema does seem like it could also fit Temari.


Age: 11 (In a year below Shikadai since she is his younger sister by a year)


Cute


Gender: Female


Cool


BirthPlace: Sand Village, due to Temari visiting whilst being Pregnant and feeling her water break in the sand village, (Land of Wind?) So she had to give birth there.


Nice, and you gave a great explanation to why she was born there. Also it's ok I call it sand village too.


Family: Shikamaru Nara (Father alive), Temari Nara (Mother alive), Shikadai Nara (Older Brother by one year alive) Gaara No Sabaku (Uncle alive: The sands village kazekage- Mother's side) Kankuro (Uncle Alive- Mothers side) , Shikaku Nara, (deceased grandfather- Fathers side), Yoshino Nara (Deceased Grandmother- Fathers side). Fouth Kazekage( Deceased Grandfather- mothers side), Karura, (Deceased Grandmother- Mothers side)


Nice and thanks for including the members of the family and their current life status as of boruto.


Appearance: She looks very similar to Shikamaru Nara her father. She inherited the signature spiky black hair, to which she puts in a low pony tail with her black fringe coming down from the sides of her face to her chin. 


Cute and the way she makes herself look different by putting the ponytail in a low one is perfect.


She has black hair, similar to Shikamaru, her eyeshape ins't like Temari but like Shikamaru. Shikadai has Temari's eyeshape, a more feminine looking one.


Cool, so she looks like a feminine version of Shikamaru than.


Temashi Nara is skinny looking and is short, she reaches up to Shikadai's Shoulders. Her skin is fair, just like her mother father and older brother. (Light skinned)


Nice, and it's a great measurement for height as well sense she is to Shikadai's shoulder, because all you have to do is put Shikadai next to someone and go to his shoulder to see where she would stand. Good job.


Temashi Nara wears a light green sleeveless zip up shirt with cream coloured shorts. On her arms, from her elbows to her wrists she wears a black fishnet. She also wears a black fishnet on her legs from her knees to her calves. On the back of her sleeveless tshirt, she has the Nara Clan symbol in White.


Nice and it's easy to imagine.


Personality: Temashi Nara is seem to be blunt and sarcastic. Unlike her father and brother, she is very quiet and only speaks when need be. And most of the time this is when she is sarcastic and blunt. She's mostly alone in her class and sits in the middle of the classroom, listening carefully to what the teacher says. 


Oh so she is the quiet type but not shy. Cool and it makes her different from the rest of her family.


Temashi's flaws is that she likes to judge people alot, which usually tends her to see people very badly and hate them. She's always seen calculating or most of the time sitting silently playing or fiddling with a small fan she has in her back short pocket.


Nice and the way you actually showed her flaws is perfect. It shows that you did sit down and think about the flaws that she could have, plus it goes with her personality. Good job.


History: Temashi is in a class lower than Shikadai due to age groups. She has a class of half boys and half girls. The teacher in her class goes through a lot of ancient history, most of them being powerful clans. One of them being the Uchiha Clan. Her sensei would always speak so highly of them, pointing out their powerful skills, charming appearance and how exceeding they were than everyone else and their natural talent to which they didn't work or earn.


Cool, I also like how you showed how the teacher is like while doing this. The fact that the teacher thinks so highly about the uchiha clan and doesn't show the others gives her a good reason to be quiet sense she is part of the Nara clan.


This irriated Temashi alot, no other small clan would be appreciated or be mentioned like the nara, uzumaki, hyuga or so on clan... Just the Uchiha's. This lead her to hating them, the two only surviving Uchiha's most, Sarada and Sasuke Uchiha.


This would lead to hate if a teacher did do this so her hate is justified. Plus the way she thinks, which is her flaw, enhances her reason to hate.


After the months and a few tests, it was proven that Temashi was highly capable in most things than her class, so the teachers decided to move her up a class, letting her land in Shikadai's year.


Nice but what did she excel in? Was it intelligence? Strength? Jutsus? Because if it was all than wouldn't she be qualified to graduate early like Itachi? Or was she recommended and tested to get moved up?


Over the years, she met Sakura Uchiha, who saw her training and asked her why put so much effort. To which Temashi answered about all her hate on powerful clans, how people don't appreciated small alliances, so she trains to better than the rest not knowing Sakura is an Uchiha.


Ok, how does she react when she finds out that Sakura is a uchiha? Well married into the uchiha family?


Battle: Temashi most of the time a backup ninja. She helps out from the back or sidelines secretly plotting traps and counter attacks. She uses her mother famous wind style, using a medium sized fan that her mother gave her for her 10th birthday telling her she'll use it when she becomes a genin getting training from both her Parents.


Cool, the way she acts in battle is also quite the combination of Temari, Shikamaru, and Sakura. It goes to show that she learns from the ones that trained her.


Skill: (0-10)


Taijutsu: Average (5)
Medical: (8) due to training under Sakura Uchiha
Wind style: Average (5)
Family Justu: (2)


I think these are pretty good but medical shouldn't be so high. I would go for 6 or 7. The reason why is because she had just started training with Sakura and it takes time to learn medicine and medical jutsu. Plus she would need good chakra control. It could still be higher than the others but not 2 points away from being perfect or else there wouln't be any place to grow and improve.


She's weaker in her family clan justu's to which she gets laughed at by outsiders, so she is later then trained under Shikamaru Nara and Sakura Uchiha.


Ok, as for the clan jutsus that is great that Shikamaru is training her but why is Sakura in it if it's a clan thing? Is she training her in chakra control so she can perform the jutsus? We already know that she is being trained by Sakura outside of the clan.


There is a reason for why Sakura is training her, I just don't want to give away a lot of my story. I'll message on private for why.


Ok, thanks.


Relationships with other Characters: 


Is Shikadai's younger sister. 


Ok


Get's irritated by Boruto Uzumaki alot because of his loud nature and bratty attitude. (Similar to Naruto and Temari when they were younger, mostly during the chunnin exams and shippuden arc)


Oh ok


Hates Sarada Uchiha.


Ok,


Likes talking to Chocho. Due to her playing with her during her childhood. Since Choco would always come over.


Cool


Finds Denki weird. (Denki has a crush on her, due to her intelligent mind and always knowing an answer or positive possibility to situations. He is inspired by her)


Oh ok, so this is also where her flaw comes in because she only sees what she wants to see and doesn't see that he is inspired by her.


Gets along with Inojin, (because of both of their blunt and sarcastic nature)


Perfect, I can see best friends at work here.


Finds Sumire kind and heartwarming, but too gullible due to Sumire's quiet and shy nature much like Hinata when she was younger.


Oh ok


Other: Admires Sakura Uchiha, because of her incredible talent and shows women are awesomely powerful ful, and that hard work does pay off in the end unlike and Sarada who she thinks naturally has powerful talent.


I can see it, Sakura did work hard to be strong while most uchihas think strength only comes naturally. Good job


Ninja attire: Changes to a lime coloured jacket that came up to her hips with no sleeves and a pale green shirt. Wears the normal ninja cargo pants but cream that come up to her calves and black ninja shoes.


Nice, and it's good for fighting and looks good to move in.
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Final Analysis- This OC is really good, however there are the few questions that i have left that need answers. Other than that this OC has little to work on and everything was to the point. Also one thing is the nickname Tema which like I said can also work for Temari so I would recommend using the second one. Thank you so much for letting me review your OC. It was a honor.
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