OC Sprint 29 (Lian Xia)

This OC is also by Ota-Kun316 thank you for giving these three they were fun. I hope you like this one.


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Name: Lian Xia (United Summer)


Cool, that's a new and good name.


Age: (I don't think of their future selves, I just go with the flow) 13-14


That's fine and that's a good age. So he's around Neji and Lee's age.


Gender: Male


Nice


Family:
Parents: 
Shou Xia = Father = Alive
Xiao Xia = Mother = Alive
Sibling(s): X


Relative(s):
Yan Shen = Cousin = Alive
Lian Xia = Cousin = Alive
Qi Shen =  Uncle = Alive
Re Shen = Aunt = Alive


Ye Xing = Uncle = Alive
Chun Xing = Aunt = Alive


Wu Shen = Cousin = Alive
Chang Xing = Cousin = Alive


Thank you for including if they were alive and their relationship to your character. It's great to see a OC with a big family.


Appearance: Lian used to be very pale but got tanner than Yuhe due to overheating. Lian has spiky red hair and red eyes with bags since he couldn't sleep well. Wears a sleeveless red Chinese martial arts top, black knee-length pants with a black rope tied around his waist. He wears a black samurai-like armor on his forearms, forelegs and upper body. Like Yuhe, his legs are wrapped with bandages and he wore One Tooth Tengu Geta sandals that are 14 cm high. Usually has blank face on or an angry expression.


Nice detail and great style. His style is similar to Tenten's with chinese type clothing. It is easy to imagine and have great culture tied to it. Awesome.


Personality: Lian is a loud person whenever he talks but tries to be quiet.  He curses often but nobody bothers to stop him since he's from the Di Branch. He has a love and hate relationship with Yuexia and the Di Branch, he sometimes love them for deciding good things but hates them for lecturing him all the time. He's really rebellious but only listens to 5 people, his cousins, parents and Yuexia. He's pretty sassy and sarcastic to everyone and can sometimes come off as a smartass. Quick tempered, that he overheats and burns the ground he's standing on. When experiencing intense negative emotions, he overheats. He doesn't let anyone push him down, he fights back whether you're an adult or not. Very protective and aggressive but has a soft side. He gets flustered easily when complimented and despite being wild, he can be tamed with kind gestures. A tsundere is another thing you can describe him. He's still from the Heir/heiress line so he knows when to be proper and serious.


A Tsundere is the perfect term to use. He seems like a very interesting and funny character that many people would love for his personality. However, instead of burning the ground because that would require chakra how about his face or body heats up to a very high temperature and when you touch him it's like heat is radiating off of him.


Battle: Lian is genjutsu user and his taijutsu is pretty good. He's only a bit sucky using ninjutsu. Lian attacks like a rabid animal, he's reckless and wild. He has no rhythm nor strategy. Unlike others whose attacks gets sloppy when angered, Lian gets stronger and leaks a murderous vibe. Remember, he overheats when he's mad, one touch from him and he'll be frying your skin. Lian's genjutsu is very different because he's from the heir/heiress line of the Xia Clan, they're solid illusions made from their opponents reason of emotion. If his opponent is feeling sad from a past event, Lian can make that event to a solid illusion, weakening his opponent's mental and emotional state. 


I like how his battle style goes with his personality but frying someone's skin because they are angry should not happen in Naruto. The suggestion I used above is more of a comical relief than a battle strategy. The murderous vibe and stuff should stay because that's him but the burning of the ground and skin should be for a comic relief, plus in anime that is what they are used for.


Past: 
Coming from the Di Branch (Low Branch) or Xia Clan, Lian was treated like a prince but was given even more freedom, they only taught him good manners. Other than that, he was free to do whatever he wants. During their stay in Sunagakure,  Lian got bored and decided to help a woman selling vegetables and fruits. It was going well till the woman had to go on an errand. A few older kids went to him and Lian was mocked and called a Commoner due to being in the Low Branch, he paid no mind to it and continued his job. Although, Lian had enough and snapped. He chuckled an apple on a boy's mouth and burnt his face, citizens of Suna saw this and became terrified of him. Lian was disappointed on his actions, knowing that he could control himself better. Lian was then banned from interacting with the civilians of Suna. When they moved out, Lian was lectured back in Yugakure and was given extra training hours on his taijutsu and genjutsu, it exhausted him and made his body sore but he knew he deserved it. Lian wasn't even allowed to leave the training room and blamed himself slightly that he couldn't comfort Yan.


I like how it goes with him but Yan burning his face without a jutsu don't make sense. How old is he at this time? I understand he is a hot head but making someone burn sounds like Bakugou from My hero academia and in that show they don't need chakra to use their quirk. Not to mention he's not a tailed beast so he can't justu have something like Gaara that he can use without chakra. Other than that this is ok.


Relationships with characters:
Sasuke = Dislikes him = Lian hates the living guts of Sasuke. Lian thought he was an asshole, a huge jerk and a power hungry idiot. No matter how times Yuhe tried to convince him that Sasuke has a good side, he can never get along with him.


Lian is one of the first OCs I met that ever hated Sasuke so already he is different. Lian does seem to be the type to not like Sasuke. The way Sasuke is and Lian I can even see how they don't get along. Nice.


Naruto = Neutral = He likes him but thinks he's an idiot. Lian would ruffle Naruto's hair a lot when never Naruto feels sad or happy. They don't talk much to each other. Naruto boasts about the ruffling as their "secret language" 


That's cute, so it's like Naruto is kinda the little buddy to Lian. I can see Naruto's hyperactive state and Lian's anger actually making them closer instead of drifting them apart. Even their relationship with Sasuke looks like it could bring them together. Cool.


Neji = Dislikes him = Lian's first thought was, a bigger jerk than Sasuke.


I did too when I first met Neji. How does Lian view Neji after he lost to Naruto? Does he change it or does he still not like him?


Shikamaru = Bestfriend = He's the only guy Lian can stand. He guessed that they bonded through silence and sleeping. They're both pretty smart too.


Cool, Lian's aggressiveness and Shikamaru's coolness could attract the other. Plus even viewing Lian I can see his best friend being Shikamaru, good job.


Others:
- Lian showed no attraction whatsoever to anyone except for Tsunade but it was not because of the body shape, it's because Lian likes aggressive girls but are not lovesick animals.


That is Tsunade. Lian does seem like the type to be into strong more aggressive girls than someone shy or gentle.


- Lian likes tigers and so being called Taiga makes him happy.


Nice, Lian's spirit animal does remind me of a aggressive animal like a tiger as well. It suits him perfectly.


I forgot to add that:


Yan is Pansexual
Yuhe is Bisexual
Lian is Aromantic


I know this was for all but it's good. It's great to see different sexualities as well. It makes a character different as well.
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Final Analysis- This OC is really good. He has a great personality and everything fits him perfectly. Nothing is out of place and his character goes well in Naruto. The only thing I would have to say is the burning without a jutsu. I would suggest using it as a comical relief or the backlash of a strong jutsu. Other than that this OC is very good. Thank you so much for letting me review him, it was a honor.
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