This OC Is by MilenaRosa19 I hope you like it.
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General Name: Hayashi, Maki (林, 真樹)

This is a very cute name

Age: 13 (Pre-Shippūden) – 16 (Shippūden)

Nice so she's in the group with the Naruto characters.

Species: Human

Cool

Gender: Female

Nice

Sexual Orientation: Pansexual

Ohhh, this is the first OC I had that was pansexual.

Blood Type: O+

Cool

Birthday: March, 08

Nice.

Personality: Maki is fierce, a bit over-protective and caring. She is also stubborn, a bit too trigger happy and very sarcastic. She’s loyal to her family and friends above anything, but can be very blunt if she needs to tell them they’re wrong.

This is good but the sarcasm doesn't belong here. Sarcastic is in a different personality group from her. If I had to use a example of two characters I would say Anko is this trigger happy and stubborn caring person but Sarcastic is Shikamaru. They are two different people, you wouldn't see Anko being Sarcastic like Shikamaru or Shikamaru being trigger happy like Anko.

Good Trait(s): Loyal, caring, funny and determined

Nice traits

Bad Trait(s): Over protective, stubborn, over-protective, sarcastic and a bit rude

Again Sarcastic is in another personality group but rude works very perfectly especially if you put it with blunt.

Like(s): Rain, writing poetry, her family, cooking and walking around

Great.

Dislike(s): Prejudice, heat, being bossed (not receiving orders from superiors, but being bossed by people who think they know better when they don’t), not being able to help her family.

Awesome

Hobby(ies): Writing poetry, cooking, dancing with her brother and doing anything with her friends.

Ok

Fear(s): Claustrophobia (Small Spaces); Erotophobia (Sexual Abuse) and Aquaphobia (Deep Water)

Nice, and very interesting.

Strength(s): Stealth, fast thinking and she’s good on nature-filled places.

Ok

Weakness(es): She’s not physically strong; has small resistance and can be a wimpy sometimes

Ok, so she can sneak around but can't attack. This is a great flaw.

Personal Quote: Yes, I’m black, yes, I’m a lady, yes, I weight more than most girls. And you know what? Yes, I can kick your ass anyway.

This quote goes great with her personality.

History: She was born as the middle child of the Itogakure clan Hayashi. She was the younger sister of Isamu, and when she was six she had a baby brother, Yasu, who was born mute. Maki has got a load of trouble because of her weight, her hair and her skin color, but she never really cared, thought what made her more furious was when anyone talked about Yasu. When she was seven her family traveled to Konoha with her family to close a commercial accord with the Akimichi Clan, which resulted on a marriage contract between the clans. At age nine, she suffered a sexual assault, but her aunt got there before it was consummate and killed the man. She had to do therapy for a long time. At age thirteen, her village was attacked by The Kyōdai Ai, a group of rogue ninjas who wanted a special balm of another clan. The Hayashi Clan tried to help, but Itogakure was basically taken up, which caused the principal clans to run to Konoha, where they had commercial/military accords.

Ok, this is really good but what do you mean she got in trouble for her skin tone? Is she not allowed to have dark skin?

Looks and Appearance Body Type/

Looks: She has a bit of board shoulders for a girl, she’s plump, which means she has a bit more of chest/hips than a average girl on her age, but nothing too large. Black skin and amber eyes. Her lips are fleshy; she has long eyelashes and slight large nose. She stands a bit on the short side, which makes her seem even chubbier.

Ok, this is very interesting, for skin is she dark brown, light brown, what exactly is her skin tone?

Height: 4’9”or 145 cm (Part I) – 5’9” or 175.2 cm (Part II)
Weight: 104.6 Ibs or 47.3 kg (Part I) – 167.3 Ibs or 75.8 kg (Part II)

This is a great height to weight ratio.

Makeup/Facepaint: Sometimes transparent gloss

Ok

Hairstyle(s): She has long curly black hair that she keeps on a braid to let out of the way

Cute

Accessories: A flower crown with blue tiny flowers and her staff/bo attached on her back

Ok

Scent: Mint and Fresh cut grass

This is the first time I met a OC who has a scent. Cool

Scars or Tattoos: Scars from her training and a larger scar on her collarbone from a knife when she was attacked.

Nice, and it's visible.

Jewelry and/or Piercings: A collar in which a bead is added every birthday.On part I she uses a baby blue shirt, black jacket and grey ninja pants, along with ninja sandals, a necklace and a flower crown. On part II she uses a blue long tunic with long sleeves, black vest, grey pants under the tunic, ninja sandals, necklace and her flower crown.

Nice, and I can imagine what she is wearing in my head.

Relationships Parent(s): Akio (Father) and Jun (Mother) Sibling(s): Isamu (Older Brother) and Yasu (Younger Brother) Relative(s): Natsuki (Aunt); Hiroto (Cousin) and Kazue (Cousin) Best

Friend(s): Maiya Fujiwara; Suzume Ikeda and Yasu Hayashi
Friend(s): Emi Abe; Ume Abe; Bo Jiang; Nuan Jiang; Zhuan Jiang; Rin Liao; Suzuki Ai; Ayumu Ishikawa; Keiko Ishikawa; Wei Minami; Chang Minami; Aki Kita; Ino Yamanaka; Shikamaru Nara; Shino Aburame; Hinata Hyuuga and Rock Lee

Sensei(s): Kenshin Abe
Student(s): N/A
Crush(es)/Spouse/Bf/Gf: Choji (Marriage Contract)
Rival(s): Kiba Inuzuka and Sora Ito Enemy(ies): The Kyōdai ai; Akatsuki; Sasuke; anyone that threatens her family and friends
Pet(s): Blue (Mountain Bird)

This goes for all of the above relationships. Really good.

Favorites/Least Favorites

Food(s): Favorite – Pizza or Lasagna/ Least Favorite – Sprout or Mushrooms Drink(s): Favorite – Mint tea or Orange juice/ Least Favorite – Black tea Color(s): Favorite – Blue and green / Least favorite – Silver and beige Season(s): Favorite – Winter / Least Favorite – Summer
Time of Day: Favorite – Night/ Least Favorite – Morning Weather:
Favorite – Rainy and Windy/ Least Favorite – Sunny and hot Flower: Favorite – Sunflower/ Least Favorite – Tulips
Animal: Favorite – Birds/ Least Favorites – Rats Ninja Information Birth

All of these are good but the pizza and lasagna, they don't really have food like that till Boruto and even than they only have burgers.

Village: Itogakure (Fell to The Kyōdai ai) Current Village: Konohagakure Academy Graduation Age: 12
Chūnin Promotion Age: N/A
Rank: Genin Ninja Status: Villager
Are you in the Akatsuki?: No
Bijuu [Tailed Beast]?: No
Teammates: Maiya Fujiwara; Suzume Ikeda (& Whiskey) and Kenshin Abe Sensei: Kenshin Abe

Nice

Her parents; her aunt and Suzu Kita

Ok

Nindo: Protect you loved ones, even if it kills you

Beautiful

Chakra Element: Earth

Cool

Weapon(s): Usually a Staff/Bo Jutsu's Genin/Chunnin level Earth jutsus Her clan Justus

Nice, I never see any staffs for OCs, my main OC has a staff too.

Kekkei Genkai: Chakra Transference Kekkei Genkai: Chakra Suction.

Nice

NINJA STATS
1 - 5: Horrible
6 - 8: Below average
9 - 10: Average
11 - 13: Above average
14 - 16: Talented
17 - 18: Gifted [This is Sannin level] Strength in Jutsu Ninjutsu [ninja techniques]: 15
Genjutsu [illusion techniques]: 7 Taijutsu [martial arts techniques]: 10 Kekkei Genkai [bloodline traits]: 12 Doujutsu [eye techniques]: 4
Kinjutsu [forbidden techniques]: 3 Fuuinjutsu [sealing techniques]: 9 Strength in Missions Intelligence: 10/11 (depends of the subject)
Wisdom: 10
Strength: 7
Agility: 9
Dexterity: 15
Stamina: 8
Constitution: 12
Charisma: 9
Comeliness: 11
Chakra Control: 12
Cooperation: 9

This is really good. She isn't OP or anything. Great job.

Note: She’s also allergic to peanuts.

Oh ok, that's a cool side note.
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Final Analysis- This is really good and has little to really work on. The only thing I would suggest is find foods that the Naruto characters ate before that could be her favorite like dango or ramen, or tomatoes. Other than that this OC has a few questions that need answers and that's it. Thank you so much for letting me review your OC, it was a honor.
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