OC Sprint (Tsuki)

Here is another OC and this is from DominaKertia and this person has a OC review as well. I Don't want to take up anyone's time so let's get started.
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Can you review my OC? Thank you in advance. I just wanted you to interview her, she might be used in fanfiction.


I hope you do put her in a fan fiction. I think it would be good. Also no problem, I love reviewing OCs.


Village: Sunagakure (This is one of the few OCs that's NOT in Konohagakure, eh?)


True that, I have seen some from sand but your right. It's not Konoha.


Name: Suna (Named after the village, not vice versa) Tsuki (Sasori doesn't have a last name so I had to make one up)


Nice.


Age: 35 in Part II, dies in the war (Part 3)


The first OC I see to die early.


Gender: Female


Cool


Family: Unnamed Father, Unnamed Mother, Sasori (Twin brother, though they aren't identical twins)


Alright so Sasori's family is her family.  So that means she is lady chiyo's granddaughter.


Appearance: Black hair (In Bun), dark brown eyes, and pale skin. Wears the general uniform for Jonin.


Sense you are part of Sasori's family I would recommend having hair color like theirs. For instance Sasori has red hair like his father. The mother has brown hair. Lady chiyo doesn't have black hair and neither does anyone else in the family. However, sense it is a very common color it counts.


Personality: Cold, Untrusting, Vengeful, Sarcastic (to most) Kind, Helpful, Amiable (to some) VERY CALM AND INTELLIGENT.


Sense she is cold and untrusting  I wouldn't put helpful or Kind at all. There is another solution though. You could use deceivious though to make people think she is kind and nice but then backstabs them. That would be the best option.


Weapon(s): Her puppets (mainly) Kunais, Shurikens, and paper bombs.
Attack(s): She is a puppet master, and like her brother, can control 100 puppets at most. However, this uses up most of her chakra and is often used as a last resort. She can make human puppets, like Sasori, but only makes them when they are from an enemy nation of Sunagakure. This allows her to use diverse chakra natures, but she only owns one herself, and that is Wind.


This is nice. It makes her similar to Sasori. I also like how she thought about the chakra natures when she made puppets. Good job.


Chakra nature: As mentioned before, wind.


Nice.


Jutsu: Can use basic ninjutsu and genjutsu but mostly uses her puppets. Epicly fails in attempting taijutsu anywhere and anytime.


Oh, a nice change of taijutsu being the bad one. Also how she doesn't use nin or genjutsu but mainly focuses on puppets. This isn't a question it's really good.


Past: Suna graduated from Ninja Academy at the age of 7 and was promoted to chunin at the age of 8, working with her twin brother. She later became jonin at the age of 10.
One day, when she and Sasori were young, they were out in the village, buying food for their parents. When they walked home, they were surprised and shocked to find that their parents were lying on the floor, dead. A man splattered with blood was next to their bodies: Sakumo Hatake. Sasori and her slowly backed away, left their home for the time being, and went out in the village to tell anyone about their parents' murder. However, no one would agree to help them.


Ok, however, Sasori's parents were murdered by Sakumo he wasn't the first to find out and he wasn't there. Remember, lady Chiyo was the first to find out because they told her that they were murdered out the village on a mission. So when it comes to their parents the story should stay the same.


My OC continued: Half an hour later when the coast was clear, they snuck back into their home to collect the bodies of their parents. They were deeply devastated by the event, and their grandmother, Granny Chiyo taught them puppetry to lift their spirits, although she was horrified by the demise of her children as well. While Sasori never used his talent for revenge, Suna used her skills in puppetry (slightly worse than Sasori's, mind you) to plan out her vengeance in order to kill Sakumo Hatake, or even torture him, despite the fact that Konohagakure and Sunagakure were allies. After a while, Sasori later joined the Akatsuki while Suna stayed behind, watching Sasori from afar with one of her puppets (it allowed her to spy on others and was in the form of an owl, with all of its abilities, such as stealthily flying extremely high sound receptors and wings that could carry large loads if needed. It was based off of the human puppet diagram). Suna was killed by Sasori in the great war but she didn't care as she knew that Sasori was being controlled and had no free will.
Thank you.


This is good. It is very different. The fact that you had Sasori kill her also would surprise people. It sure does surprise me. To be honest I'm surprised you had her killed in general. It's very unique to see a OC die and in the way she did. She didn't even accomplish her dream.


Additional facts:
-Was one of the greatest strategists in Sunagakure, with an IQ of 220 (If I'm correct, Shikamaru's was slightly greater than this).
-Birthdate: November 8
-Sexuality: Heterosexual
-Her name, Suna Tsuki, means, "Sand Moon."
-She once had a crush on the Third Kazekage and acted as a second caretaker for Gaara when his aunt was sick


Nice fun facts.
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Final Analysis- This OC is extremely good and interesting. The fact that she was killed by someone of her family and her fighting style is different from others makes her unique. However, when it comes to making a OC a Canon character's family the OC would need to share traits with the family. They would need to look a little like one member of the family. Like Sasori looks like his dad. Naruto looks like his and Shikamaru looks like his. So that would be the only thing other than the defect with the personality. Kind and cold Don't really mix. Other than that this OC is really good. It was a honor reviewing her.

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