OC 75 (Uzumaki Akinori)

This oc is by AngeelBbang I hope you like it.
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Genre : An AU fanfiction that will change a LOT in the story. 


Alright. If it changes a lot than I'll keep that in mind.


After his parents' death, Naruto is not alone as his parents have relatives to take care of him. That will change a lot in the plot of the manga (not that I dislike it) 


Your fine, it's ok


Name : Uzumaki Akinori (Bien Namikaze Akinori) | Kanji : 明紀 うずまき 
Translation : Akinori ▶️ Aki(ra) that means "the light coming from sun", "sunlight and moonlight", "bright", "intelligent", "wisdom" or "truth" (明) and Nori (紀) that means ages ▶️ Brightness of ages - The light that comes from the sun since generations - Ancient (or long living) wisdom or truth 
Nickname : Aki


Nice, thanks for the translation and the nickname.


Age : Pre-Naruto (Kiyuubi's attack) : 20 ½
PT 1 : 32 ½ - 33 ½
PT 2 : 37 ½ - 38 ½


Oh he's alot older.


Birthday : April 2


Nice


Gender : Male


Oh, a male OC, nice


Family : 
• Masako Uzumaki (Wife - Alive - Pre-Naruto age : 21 ¾) 
• Akisa Uzumaki (Daughter - Alive - PT 1 age : 11 - 12) 
• Rinji Uzumaki (Son - Alive - PT 1 age : 5 years old )
• Wakiji Uzumaki (Son - Alive - PT 1 age : 6 months ) 
• Genkei Uzumaki ( nephew - Alive - PT 1 age 22 - 23 ) 
• Naruto Uzumaki ( Nephew - Alive - PT 1 age : 12 - 13 ) 
• Minato Namikaze ( Cousin - Dead )
• Kushina Uzumaki (Sister-in-law - Dead)
• Hiroko Namikaze (Mother - Dead)
• Wakiji Sashiko (Father - Clanless - Dead )


This Is a interesting family tree.


Appearance : Akinori have a medium complexion, or an ivory skin colour. He have dark blue eyes and brandy hair colour (In the Pre-Naruto and PT 1) that are short cutted, but are braided on the right side, just behind his ear, the braid nearly reachs up his shoulder but it's up nearly 1cm from it. (a look that was inspired from Obi Wan Kenobi from the Draw Ward's series look from the 1st episode (the first one in the prequel series). 


Nice, and thanks for the reference.


(In the 2nd part) his hair are quite long, but still short and combed mostly to the back and near the left side (Like Obi wan in the 2nd movie of Star wars, prequel series)


Good to see he didn't change to much but still changed like the referenced person.


Outfits : 
As a Genin / Not wearing the Jounin Uniform type style : He wears a long sleeve underwear (The usual ones, like anko) with a beige sleeveless jacket that have the Uzumaki clan's symbol on his left chest/side of the jacket (it was originally the Namikaze's clan symbol (the one used in one of Naruto Shippuden's movies, that is on Menma Namikaze's outfit). He wears a simple dark blue pant, and have the usual Shuriken cases and the kunai's ones. Sometimes he use a short sword (if needed only, he usually put it on a parchment scroll). His headband is wrapped around his neck or his forehead and sometimes around his arm. 


This is a nice outfit and easy to imagine  thanks to the references it has.


Chunin/Juonin : He wears the usual outfit ( jacket) but altered it a bit with wearing a shirt that is sleeveless in one arm and the other is ¾ sleeve and put the Uzumaki symbol on the front of Jacket. And the jacket is dark blue while the shirt is beige. He wears only one glove, in the arm that do not have a sleeve and wrapped up protective strip (like the ones used by boxers) on his forearm. He can put his headband on his forehead or incorporate the area with Konohagure's symbol to his Jacket, in the other side than the clan symbol. 


Nice like the other outfit this is easy to imagine on him thanks to your descriptive skills.


Civilian : He usually wears a simple outfit. A simple blue pant and a beige with some black shirt with short sleeves. 


Nice and simple, good


Part 2 : His outfit improved a bit as his everyday outfit are his usual dark blue pant, and he wears the same shirt as his jounin outfit minus the jacket that is replaced by a sleeveless simple open jacket. His outfit are Dark Blue, beige with black.


Like before this is a good simple outfit.


Personality : Akinori is a kinda of a wise man, that is generally gentle with everyone and try to help people too. He is also a bit of a hype and is really energic (tho, and for his family's happiness, he is far from Gai and is not a practice holic or just not to that extreme) he just is always doing something and is excited easily. He actually is not calm, but hyperactive and he showshis face reflect his emotions easily (when he is not on a serious mission or if he shouldn't do it) and he can get from happy to angry to annoyed easily, well not that easily but some people have this strange power to make him switch off his emotion quickly (called Naruto, Gai and Genkei essentially) and if he is angry, he can get a bit violent, well not with everyone but he can beat up some people rumps if they deserves it (and they will deserves if if they say bad things about his family). As a young boy he wasn't a kind of thinking then attacking, mostly he wasn't kind of thinking at all and was hype then lazy and lived to fight.
Now, he improved, he thinks and attacks in the same time. As a sensei and a father or paternal figure, he oblige himself to be a good example. He is mature, and (now) is patient and try to teach younger people to be patient.He is also very protective of his family and loved ones and have somehow a sacrificial spirit, that only awake when his loved one are on a really danger or if he see that people that cannot protect themselves. He is not of a joke person but use sarcasm a lot, and tho he find Naruto pranks annoying his inner self (the Aki that he used to be before being a sensei and a Jounin) found it cool, but for the se*y Jutsu used by Naruto not good at all and usually get angry when he use it. He, and even if he try not to shows it, absolutely is afraid of spiders. And he loves to show affection towards his wife, family and his friends, but he was mostly a really serious person with his team at first. He don't easily trust people, but that doesn't mean he will not be nice with them as he is a nice person, but he just will not trust them easily. And when someone lost his trust, he will hold it against it all his life and never forget. 


This is a very amazing and scripted personality that just makes you feel like you actually met the person and know them. This goes above and beyond when it comes to writing a personality like every last detail is here. Amazing job.


Likes : His wife - Reading - His family - Eating Okonomiyaki - Seeing people happy - Tea - Sunlight - Cats and wolves 


Nice


Dislikes : When people say or do bad things about his family - Sexy Jutsu - Being cutted off when he is talking - perverted things - When people think he is stupid or that he didn't understand things


Very relatable to people and it makes him a but realistic with the last few dislikes.


Battle :
Kenkei genkei : As having Namikaze blood he have their Kenkei genkei, which is called the Swift Release, that can make you incredibly speed or more specific it have a link with time and space, as it can make you be really fast and make some of the powerful members make it like teleportation. (I couldn't find lot of informations about it, so I just goes with my imagination and the informations I was able to find) 


It's fine don't worry because you still attempted to find the information. I hope you find or have found it.


Weapons : He usually use the kunais and Shurikens, but also have a small sword within a parchment scroll. 


Nice


Chakra : He, having a swift release, have a natural affinity with wind chakra type or Futon, tho his own basic chakra is Earth or Doton. 


Nice, and his swift release is a cool touch.


Jutsu : He us basic Jutsus, like the Clone Jutsu, Transformation Jutsu, the body replacement (with a Doton clone) he also can use more advanced Doton Jutsu and some basic Futon Jutsu, like the Smoke dome, the attraction jutsu, etc. 


Nice and the fact that you used other jutsus as the reference to let me know what you did is great.


Rank (Academic) : Jounin 


Nice


Weaknesses / Least controlled
power : Genjutsu - Chakra manipulation (When he was young, now, he just struggle a little because he cannot concentrate easily) 
Strength / Best controlled : Taijutsu
Middle : Ninjutsu (Middle to good)


This is all really good.


Past : Akinori is born from an Namikaze mother and a clanless father. His mom meet his dad during one of her mission, when she come back in a really bad shape. She fainted in the wood and it was his father that saves her. He is to live in a small house outside Konohagure and is the on of a merchant. They both feel in love Nd wanted to get married, his mother's father was not happy with that but accepted to let them get married. But before his birth and a few months after their marriage, his father died from a sickness. Her mother came back to her family and he was adopted by them. His mother came back as a ninja and he was (hardly) accepted by the family. He used to live with his mother's cousin (2nd degree) who happens to be Minato's father. His life wasn't sad, as he wasn't bullied and his mother provided him whatever he needed. Things became hard when his mother died during a A-Rank mission and he was raised by his uncle, with Minato and his brother, Hayate. He became a Genin at the age of 12 ½, due to his excitement (the first year, at the age of 11, he couldn't sleep and he was tired the day of the exam, his uncle and his sensei decided to let him take the test the next year, and focus on helping him contrôle his hyperactivity (which didn't work well because he became hype and can now stay awake 3 days in a row, bit will sleep more than 17 hours after ) 


After becoming a Genin, he was put in the team 12, along with two girls. He was close to one of his teammates but not so much with the other because she wasn't as hype or interested in training a lot. He was the only one that was able to make her become angry, and he loved to prank her. He takes 2 more years o become Chunin and it's during this time that he confessed his deleting to his teammate, the one that he didn't get along with at first, Masako. 


After the Kyuubi's attack, he and his wife, Masako decided to take care of their nephew and protect him and love him like a true family.


This whole past is great and has amazing detail and shows some of the changes for your story. I can't wait to read it myself.


Relationship with other characters :


Minato : He is a 2nd degree cousin with him as their parents were cousin's, children of two cousins. When his mother died, he was taken care by his uncle, Minato's father and he became closer to him. Minato was like a role model for him. When he died, he was truly affected like he lost a big brother he cared for so much. 


This is a very sweet relationship.


Kushina : He used to be really close to her, as Minato was always talking about how she is strong, how she is perfect or how she isherself. He, then, goes to meet her and see if it was true. Both became really close then and she was the sister he always wanted. 


Very cute


Masako : She is his Queen. Both were in the same team, Team 12 and both didn't get along well. They start to know each other slowly, and he felt in love with her because even if he is a kind, not really into violence and calm person, if she sees someone that need help and that she have to fight, and maybe die, she will go and fight. He knows that if he couldn't find any solution for a problem, he just need to ask her some advices. 


Nice and the fact that they had conflict with each other ahead of time is a great touch showing their differences.


Naruto : He is his nephew, that he loves like his own son. He is also one of the few people that makes him annoyed or angry quickly. Despite the fact that he is a trublemaker, he loves him deeply and will always protect him. He is over protective towards him because of the fact people hates him because of the nine-tailed beast in him.


Nice, the fact that you gave Naruto someone to look up to and care for him is very nice.


Genkei : His nephew is one of the other people that actually can make him go from happy to sad to worried to angry really quickly (Like Naruto) and being someone that loves to go on adventures just like that make him worrying about him. They lives each other a lot, tho and Genkei come to seek advice from him a lot too. 


Nice, like Naruto this is a good relationship.


Hayate : His cousin, and Minato's brother. They don't like each other and wherever they sees each other, it end up on a fight. The reason is that Hayate decided not to acknowledge Naruto as his nephew and was about to let him live alone like an orphan and even think that he is responsible of his parents' death, even tho he don't like his brother that much. 


The fact that he has a enemy is really good. It shows that bit only do he has loved one and friends but also people that hate him and enemies. It makes him realistic that he has a openly hatred with this guy.


Iruka : He is friend with iruka and both try to deal with Naruto and Genkei. This it's not that easy. He think the Chunin is a good person and if something happens to him he know that he will take care of his family for him. 


I never see the relationship with iruka so this is great to have, the fact that Naruto and Genkei is involved as well makes this the more better.


Gai : He couldn't stand Gai, not that he hates him, but wherever their team used to meet, Gai was trying to impress Masako. And Akinori DISLIKE it.


Oh so a little jealousy, it's good that that flaw is shown here especially with a guy sense with OC guys it's pretty much nonexistent.


Other : 
He take the Uzumaki Name when he married his wife. In Japan, it's community to take your wife's name if her family don't have any other male heir or if you will be working on their family business or if you want to cut off any link to your family. 
In this case, it was the 2nd case, as the Uzumaki clan wasn't that huge anymore, he decided to take the name to not let it go (as originally, Kushina take Minato's name) 
And the 2nd reason (for me) is that because it will be easier to gain custody of Naruto and still protect his identity (Of being Minato's son).


This is amazing and the fact that he took the name to also protect Naruto is just amazing and really well thought out. Great job.
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Final Analysis- This OC is ready for his fanfiction. His character is well written and goes great with the story even if it wasn't AU. I couldn't really find anything to truly work on because any questions I had was answered when I scrolled down a bit more. I can't wait to read his story. Thank you for letting me review your OC. It was a honor.
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