OC from the story Akashi

Hey guys today I'm doing a OC by NWO_FullMetal who has the story named Akashi. I did Akashi from the request in the past and now I have one of his teammates. This is exciting and I hope you guys like this OC. Also if you like Akashi and this OC make sure to check out their story. Now on with the OC.
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Name: Kaito Roka


Meaning: From Japanese 海 (kai) meaning "sea, ocean" combined with 斗 (to), which refers to a Chinese constellation, or 翔 (to) meaning "soar, fly". Other kanji combinations are also possible. 


Roka: Japanese name meaning "White crest of the wave". 


Source: Behindthename.com


A very interesting name. Thanks for the meaning and combination.


Gender: Male


Great, and people say their aren't any male Naruto OCs. They need to look.


Birthdate: November 3rd


Thanks for the birthdate.


Family: Miyoko Roka (Mother) Alive), Yukio Roka (Father), Naname Roka (Sister)


Nice family. By the way is Naname a older or little sister? That's it. I believe they are all alive.


Personality: He's very troubled, pretends to not care, hides his emotions. He's very stubborn and doesn't feel comfortable asking for help. He's often shunned from conversations with his family since they think they know everything. 


He does seem very troubled. It's good to see he is in the same grouping of emotions. Instead of seeing shy, sweet, adventurous, mean, and all that crap.


He often finds himself questioning whether or not if his family loves him or not since most of the time he feels neglected and often feels as though his parents play favorites with his little sister, Naname


Ok so Naname is the little sister. Alright, this can be relatable to many people which would make people love him more. Many older siblings feel neglected by parents because of the younger sibling getting all the attention. This adds character and a hint of jealousy, nicely done.


As a result, he's often cold and refuses to acknowledge anyone other than himself. 


Like I said with the older sibling and the younger getting the credit. It is very relatable. Great job.


He often thinks of Akashi as a rival, yet at the same time secretly admires his determination to achieve his goals. He views Akashi sort of as an older brother figure since he never knew what it was like to have an older sibling.


A good way to put it. It also adds to the rivalry. Like how Naruto Is Sasuke's rival and thinks of him as a brother, Akashi and Kaito are the same. Plus siblings do love to out do each other which makes the rivalry and brotherly friendship more powerful.


Although, he would never admit any of this to Akshi willingly. 


Again, it adds to the rivalry. You wouldn't want them to know what you actually thought of them like that and this OC brings that into perspective. I can tell you really thought him out as you were making him.


Kaito often uses his crush on Hana as a goal to work toward. His feelings for Hana often cloud his judgment and the real him stands out when she's alone with him. He lacks courage but is determined to gain his courage and strength. 


So what exactly is the real him? Is the real him nice? Kind? Shy? Sense Hana is the only person that would know how does he formally act when he is around her? Also this is just like some kids and their crushes. Letting the love interest know the real you. It adds a little romance to their relationship.


Age: 6-18 in Part 0.5: 


Skin: Fair


What is fair? Is he white? Black? Tanned? Fair skin can be anything. Fair white skin, fair black skin. Or is he in the middle?


Hair Color: Black


Good common color.


Hairstyle: Short, Spiked. 


Simple and easy to imagine. Which is good.


Eye Color: Leaf Green.


Ok so green.


Clothing: 


Color Combination: Black, Blue, Green


Apparel: 


Part 0.5: 


Age 6-13: baggy black shorts, sandals, A navy blue tank top with a light green overshirt


A simple and perfect style for a kid going to his teens.


14-18: Standard Chunin uniform


Alright. It's nice to see a OC in uniform.


Parts 1&2: 19, Part 1, 25, Part 2, (26-27 (Part 2.5): Standard Anbu Uniform


Oh a Anbu. I don't think I have seen a OC wearing the Anbu uniform yet. Correct if I'm wrong but cool.


Part 2.5 (The last) 27: Black pants, green belt, navy blue long sleeve shirt, forest green vest. and black sandals. 


Nice to see the OC is wearing something simple and easy. Also the color combination is perfect too. It adds to him that he wears only the colors he enjoy.


Part 3: (Boruto years: Same as above.) 


Cool.


Clan: Roka Clan


Oh a made up clan. Nice.


Roka Clan Details: The Roka clan is a branch family of the Yuki Clan of Kirigakure.


This is unique. With all the OCs I have reviewed I have yet to see a OC from a made up clan branch. This is great because so far only the Hyuga's are one and adding more to a story will bring in more originality. This is great your creativity is amazing.


Before the 2nd Shinobi war, the members of the Roka clan were used as servants of the Yuki clan. The Yuki clan used the Roka clan members as bait to protect them from Amegakure's invasion. The Baruka clan eliminated a large portion of the Roka clan. Though not every member of the Roka clan is deceased several members have sought refuge and freedom in various neighboring countries. 


Wow, like I said before I have yet to see something like this. I praise you for it. This is perfect in the way that the main people. (The Yuki clan) used the branch. (The Roka clan) for their on benefits. This is something I have yet to see in OC clans. Great job.


Kekkei Genkai: Ice Release


Cool


Affiliation: Konohagakure


Perfect and standard.


Fighting Style: Ninjutsu (1st choice) Genjutsu 2nd, Taijutsu (very limited Taijutsu ability.) 


This is interesting. I usually see the OC being the best at Taijutsu. This OC is very different. Even with his personality you would think he would be the best at Taijutsu. I suppose don't judge a book by it's cover apply here. Nice work.


Preferred Range: Long Range Attacks


Good, goes great with ninjutsu.


Weapon of choice: Bow & Arrow.


A good weapon to use for Long range as well. Not to mention it is very possible to have in the Naruto world.


Classification: Anbu Member (age 18+) meaning he eventually he wants to one day be the leader of the tracking unit in the leaf village by Part 3. he is In charge of it all) or will he? That is the question. 


Oh a twist. Perfect for a OC. Always leave the readers for something to think about. It brings mystery to the Character.


Jutsu Capabilities: 


Advanced Techniques (learns during Part 2 and onward)


Perfect for part 2.


These also use up large amounts of Chakra and therefore will lead to exhaustion and damage his hands and the if he exceeds the number of times he can use them, they may backfire and freeze his veins. (Thus killing him) So he can't push himself too hard, the consequences could be dire.


Perfect consequences. I have yet to talk about OPness and this is the way to NOT be OP. The way he has to be careful or he could die adds to his strength and power. Not to mention ninjutsu is his strongest suit so it makes him have to work harder. A amazing attribute for this OC.


Ninja Art: Freezing Rain Storm: Unleashes a flurry of shards of Ice causing the enemies skin to freeze on impact. (Doesn't learn this until Shippuden years.)


This is a powerful Justu. It is good to see he learns it when he is more advanced.


Ninja Art: Healing Crystals: Creates a barrier around the user and their allies. A healing circle is created once the barrier is created, once in it the individual begins to heal rapidly.) 


I see, this also is a powerful Justu that not even Tsunade or Sakura has come up with. How much chakra does this move take up? Is their consequences to this jutsu? It just seems a little OP. Not too much but just making it.


Ninja Art: Freezing Arrows: creates a bow made of ice and when he pulls the line back it generates ice arrows. These arrows can freeze their targets on impact from the inside. (Used too often the consequences could result in one's death. 


The consequences are death which is good. This jutsu does feel like it needs a consequence so the consequences of using it to much is perfect. Good job.


Ninja Art: Crystal Ice Mirrors: (He teaches Haku this technique.) read my story to find out how.


Alright, to the readers read the story to find out how.


There's more but should be enough of a preview for now. 


That's good, we don't want to spoil the whole character. Or what would be left to go off of.


Moderate Jutsu Techniques:


Ninja Art: Summoning Jutsu 


(Learns during Chunin Exams)


Multi Shadow Clone Jutsu


(Learns it the week before the graduation test at 9.) 


Did he also take the scroll like Naruto? The reason Naruto was able to learn it is because he is a Uzumaki and their chakra is above the charts. It takes tons of amount of chakra to use this Jutsu and to even come across it because Naruto had to steal it. So how did he learn it and does he have enough chakra to use it?


Basic Jutsu Techniques: Ice Style: Gloves of Shimo: Covers the user Allows the user to throw shards of ice at their enemy. (Regular use)


Transformation Jutsu (D Rank)


Escape Jutsu (D Rank)


Substitution Jutsu (D Rank)


Chakra Nature: Fire (Primary) Water (Secondary) 


So does he know any fire or water jutsus? So far I have only seen crystal and Ice so does he even know any fire and water jutsus to begin with? Or does he learn them over time?


Summoning Choice: Currently Undecided. 


There are alot of animals in the world so the options are varied. I had a OC reviewed where they chose a mole and that was a perfect choice and it went with their jutsus. So for summoning it should be something that has to do with his elements.
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I hope you all liked it and sorry I just got a new phone and I'm trying it out. I'm so happy that I forgot I was in the middle of a OC review. So I apologise for that. Now for the final analysis.


Final Analysis- This OC has great qualities. However, the only thing I would like to know more about is how he has fire and water but doesn't use it. The other thing is for skin. For skin, fair isn't a color. When I think of skin tones I think of white, black, tanned, pale and Medium (between white and black). Other people are also the same. They also think of those colors. So that's the only thing. Leave the color in the comments. Other than that this OC is another great one. I hope I get more from you.
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Again I am happy that I am getting these requests and I got a new phone so I am extra dang happy. I can't wait to do the next OC review. I have about 5 or 4 more that I am going to start working on. Till then thanks for reading.

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