Reviewer: Rare__Raven
Story reviewed: Scream
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                 Overall comments:
A butterfly-inducing mystery with just the right amount of clues but right now it sounds like it’s still a rough draft with regards to the grammar and structuring. But overall, this is exactly what I call a good thriller.
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Cover:
10/10
Good visibility, interesting cover. I like it.

Title:
10/10
Absolutely gold. Scream. It’s vague but at the same time you know it’s going to be something dangerously scary.

Description:
10/10
Brilliantly written. Not too revealing, but not too vague either. Reyna's personality check plus a basic idea of the story has been given in the description which is great.

Basic plot:
10/10
A party, a suspicious character, some bloody artwork, people going missing and ending up dead. Some friends, each one of them keeps getting individual messages and the idiots don’t even share it with each other. It’s awesome.

Content:
9/10
Okay I’ll start with why the 1 off. The 1 off is because there are some really weird analogies in there. Like I found them weird at least. There were some tiny sentences in the story that I found weird. That’s all. Nothing much to worry about.

The rest of the content is so well written that I can’t even put it into words! What and who are you and what have you done with my urge to get back to studying?! It’s just so well written, the mystery. Like damn, that’s some serious talent.

I loved that it was exactly the sort of unpredictable that I usually want my stories to be. Like I wasn’t expecting to find Della's mother dead but then BAM! And I’m like, “Yeah, this makes perfect sense wtf and htf is this so good!?” and you actually had me going wide-eyed and open-jaw-ed, a feat not many wattpad mystery writers have managed to achieve lmao.

Pace + Sequence:
9.5/10
It was a bit slow at first. The entire, “My friend is a boy crazy weirdo" wasn’t much fun to read but overall the pace was awesome and once you launched into the actual plot, there was no stopping you from achieving a good pace.

Grammar + Punctuation + Tense:
7/10
Literally the only disappointment. It wasn’t bad enough to put me off obviously, but some punctuations are ill-placed and incorrect grammar has been used, especially in the first chapter. Not so much in the other chapters but yeah.

Also you’re using words as verbs when they’re not supposed to be used in that context.

Like for example, at one place you’ve written:

“[Insert Dialogue],” I gratify.

I don’t think gratify can be used like that. If you mean to say that you were grateful or rather, that your character was, you can just use, ‘I reply, immensely grateful’.

Because originally, the word gratify, or gratifying in the verb form, means to be satisfied or to satisfy someone else. And there’s a lot of other words you’ve used in a similar way, which according to me at least, is incorrect.

Or say, if you did mean “to satisfy someone else", you should instead use this:

“[INSERT DIALOGUE],” I gratified him/her. Makes more sense.

Because 'gratify' is the wrong form of the word to be used there, I believe. The addition of things like ‘ing’ and ‘ied' makes a lot of difference to the word form.

The tense was pretty much perfectly maintained though.

Structuring/Tone + Voice
9.8/10
This was fine.

Originality:
10/10
It sounds original to me.

Reader enjoyment:
10/10
I enjoyed it a lot. I’m gonna read the rest of the book probably.

Overall score:
95.3/100

GREAT JOB!

Now for apologies. I'm really sorry for making you wait for so long. Not only did I have practical examinations at school and tests and a bunch of other stuff, I was also going through a period of extreme inactivity and unproductivity. Much like writer's block, I was going through a general productivity block.

Of course, that's no excuse for my tardiness which is why I apologize.

Thank you for choosing me.
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